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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I think it would be better if we had a clear point of view of who the reader is following. If any of the characters are going to be important, they should have names. It's a little confusing with "The guard said this" or "The other guard said that". Description could also help; describe the castle, what Marissa was feeling, was she anxious? Proud? Glad? It's a good skeleton for the story, but I think it needs more meat on the bones, if you know what I mean.
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