Hello: I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was very creative, funny, and very descriptive of what was going on. I almost could picture all
of the funny things and not so funny things that was happening to this young man. In some sense it reminded me of my son and how it would
be like for him going off to college. The ending was really a cute one. So the sound never left as it was inside the boys head :)!! HA. Thank you
for this cute read and I will hand it off to my daughter to read as well. I sent you a nice blue ribbon for your work I hope you like it.
Hello: This is so sad and so real. It happens all the time and everyday. How to go on without your other half. It is scary I say. It is
written well. I like it a lot. It has so much feeling and meaning to it. Thank you for sharing this poem.
I like this poem of dance. It seems it starts out really intense and all is going well. The stumble seems to come over both dancers and they seem to distance themselves and lady is left standing. To anxious maybe to dance, to hold, and more harmony and grace could help that in future for these lovely dancers. She will find another and she will learn to ease in on the dance :)
Doroshii Makure
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