It's his duty to humanity
Just like living and dying
Is ours...
That sent a chill up my spine. It is a phrase that I've never heard before, but it was an excellent line. As though living and dying isn't just something that happens; it's our duty. I wonder what would happen if one were to stray from that path?
I am sorry to hear about the falling out between you and your friend. That can be painful, but that pain and raw emotion can motivate a very empowering poem.
The way you refer to him and yourself as the exact same entity tells volumes about the nature of your friendship. May it serve you well as a catalyst of motivation.
You know, in Canada we still prefer Tobogganing in a lot of places. I was definitely always the one egging the other kids on to stand up, or go backwards. Sadly, my brother was often the one to take the fall haha. Nice piece!
It took me a minute to realize his inner dialogue(or was that his moral compass?). I am curious to see where it leads, and if it is indeed him talking to himself, a third party or entity, or perhaps the narrator himself.
Regardless it is a good hook with intriguing possibilities! Well done!
Well written! I feel for you. Sometimes things must be broken or they will never change. One had to first break the marble that became the statue of David, or no one would have ever seen the beauty of the possibility within.
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.07 seconds at 5:48pm on Nov 23, 2024 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
