I have to admit, I have never read a story with this kind of writing style. Though it took me a bit to get used to it, the style you used had quite the charm to it! It was quite a fun read, between the plotline you used, the writing syle, and how the story progressed. You did a good job on writing it, there were no errors that I could see (grammer-wise), the story and plot were well done, as was the telling of it. It was a easy story to connect to, and again, was a fun read.
This poem is a lovely work piece. It's simple in the writing and style, yet is has such a larger and a much deeper meaning. It really lets readers feel the pain of the narrator, and it lets readers truly think.
This was quite the interesting poem! The language used was well described, painting a beautiful picture in the mind's eye. It was an easy read as well, the words blending together nicely to tie a gorgeous poem together.
I greatly enjoyed reading this quite a bit. Your story truly showed that even the nicest of beings can be burned because of that very characteristic. I felt sorry that Mrs. Aslam had to go through that, but I also felt that she was much too naive. She and every other character filled their part well, you got each person to fit into the story easily. Your writing flowed well and it was easy to read, enjoyable as well of course!
I'm afraid I probably did not make much sense with this review. In short I thought it was a very good read and I enjoyed your writing style.
Very interesting plot line! Your word usage and detail made this story a very nice read. I was able to think of what the main character felt with the words and emotions you potrayed through your writing.
The only thing I noticed were some misspelled words.
- realised/realized
- coloured/colored
In this sentence, (“Come Ms. Balshine, your brother will see you now” said the man who had now moved towards the open door.) You'll want to add a comma after now when he has finished speaking.
To be honest I'm surprised I even caught those. I was too far into the story worrying about the main character and what would happen than to worry about spelling errors. It was on the second time reading this that I hardly noticed.
You are a good writer and I hope to read more from you! Thank you for sharing your story.
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