Good story and interesting, but it feels a little rushed. Perhaps a stop in one location for awhile and more showing so that the reader can make sense of the whole universe distortion and
the planet you and your crew landed on. The planets, animals, landscape and more discussion with the creatures on it, would be good. KEEP GOING! Interesting overall though.
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