I felt while I read it that it was a dream falling into place was a good way of beginning it, but then it flowed into a supernatural piece and that is where I lost it. I was good, just personally if Max Griffin had kept it either as a dream or has a dark piece it would have flowed evenly. Again it was good, but it could have been better as I see it.
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