Hello Tinker!

I'm short on time but felt "Week 5 Independence Day"  was worthy of Drive-By.

What impacted me:

Lol. Amen was the first thing I wanted to say about us forgetting what this Holiday is about. But also because people don't really know the history surrounding this event as well and how much gaining our freedom ended up restricting our freedoms for quite a while. History is a fickle thing depending on who tells it, isn't it?

That aside, I enjoyed your take on the colors. I always reflect on this day as well and try and remember what the real purpose of it is but I always get lost in the purpose of wanting to make my children say oooh and aaah and have a good time with those I love.

But Red, White, & Blue always make me think of the 4th of July and patriotism.

Any Suggestions:

Just some expansion on your thoughts, that's all!

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep on Writing!

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Hello Christopher Roy Denton!

I'm short on time but felt "Week 5 - W/E 7/5/20"  was worthy of Drive-By.

What impacted me:

Ooh-la-la. I really enjoyed this piece. Even though its focus was a color I was lost in the moment. I do adore a bit of erotica honestly and in poetry it can be so beautiful when painted with such beautiful words and rhymes to make it sing.

You made ME desire this woman, the moment was perfect with the fire and logs, there's tastes and smells and well, chocolate... like you warned, that is already an addiction walking into this poem so I'm game.

Wonderful job, this was awesome.


Any Suggestions:

Pfft, not a damn thing.

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep on Writing!

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Hello Soldier_Mike!

I'm short on time but felt "Pink"  was worthy of Drive-By.

What impacted me:

Forgive me for the moment of sexist thinking but the last thing I expected was a gentleman to be singing the praises of pink in the sunset. There is absolutely nothing wrong with it, I think it's wonderfully refreshing actually, it just surprised and delighted me. I love it when the unconventional happens.

You did wonderful with this Triolet and using the repeated lines to pull us into the pink pale and clouds above. I had no choice but to be cushioned within the fluffiness of the pink hues that encompass dusk that are often overlooked for the firey oranges that set the sky on fire.

Any Suggestions:

Pfft. nothin', well done.

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep on Writing!

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Hello Ned!

I'm short on time but felt "Grey"  was worthy of Drive-By.

What impacted me:

This is a fantastically detailed haiku that definitely paints a wonderfully colorful image of grey.

Every line left a lasting image in my head that carried over into the next line and stacked upon each other through to the final line of your haiku.

The mental image left behind of the morning's grey weathered face was well painted with your words and in a haiku nonetheless, which is not easy to do.

Bravo.

Any Suggestions:

Not a damn thing.

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep on Writing!

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Hello Beholden!

I'm short on time but felt "Green"  was worthy of Drive-By.

What impacted me:

I love to see people's interpretations of color and you did not disappoint. Green is actually one of my favorite colors. What I did not expect was a comparison of the color green in such a plain object as that of a bottle.

What made it more interesting is that as I followed along in your words I could picture the different depths of color that that green bottle likes to reflect. even the dark areas that almost appear black.

You really took that bottle and explored it in more depth than i ever could've imagined and that's what I find fascinating with people that can write so visually. Fantastic job!

Any Suggestions:

Nada

Thanks for sharing your work. Keep on Writing!

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Hello Mastiff ! I'm reviewing "Moving!"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2020" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

My favorite part about Limericks is how fun it is to read them. You always slip right into the right lyrical melody when reading a good Limerick.

Not only that but when a limerick is Satirical in nature, as it should be, and can give you a good chuckle with the imagery given, it can become an infectious earworm very quick!

Conventions:

Limericks have a pretty standard syllable count. I had to look it up on Shadowpoetry.com, but it looks like it should be 9-9-6-6-9 for you syllable count.

There is an extra syllable in your final line:

So wifey chased him damn near to Boston! (10 syllables - maybe take out "So"?)

but it reads smooth enough that you can hardly tell at all!

Suggestions:

Fix that last 10 syllable line

Consider adding another stanza to fill out the color of the poem, perhaps a second one expressing the humorous disgust of his wife.

Please consider adding a WritingML Help for dropnote or simply a divider to the bottom of your poem and linking to both the Form itself and to the contest itself. Also adding the information about the form requirements here would be helpful to your readers and judges! (Note: Contests won't count this information against you or your word/line counts!)



Additional Comments:

This was a great little Limerick and it gave me a good laugh! Good luck in both the contest and in "I Write in 2020" .

Keep on Writing!

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Hello Maryann ! I'm reviewing "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

I found this link on the February Raid Page and I have sent you many reviews already but I really felt this group deserved a review. I have been a member for quite some time though not always active. I have always felt at home here. The Captains and Guardians are all really nice and engaging. I also think we are all well compensated for reviewing at different levels. I noticed that in my notepad I still had the old review gift point chart and was pleasantly surprised that since I had last been a Guardian that payments for reviews had raised.

I love the encouragement that the Guardians, Captains, and Upper Staff provide. This is a wonderful reviewing group and I am glad it has withstood the test of time. A lot of reviewing groups have faded away in the past few years. Like Showering Acts of Joy! I liked them too.

Additional Comments:

Congratulations on hosting the most wonderful reviewing group on WDC. You should really be proud of your achievements and your staff, and what this group accomplishes. It's truly amazing to see the stats. I'm very proud to be a part of it.

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Hello Maryann ! I'm reviewing "Helping Links"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

I wish I could've found something like this when I was a newbie. Although I found my way just fine with the helpful staff and different reviewing groups that used to be around this would've been handy to have on hand!

I think even more so now that there are less reviewing groups that these links will come in handy even more. I like that they are made up from WDC Power Reviewers only as well, it makes it feel like the group is more than just a group, but a family.

You have gresst links to all of the hardest things to learn about on the site: Linking, Reviewing, & templates, but you also have a ton of other useful links for even how to use google, campfires, poetry forms, and helpful hints.

Suggestions:

There are a couple of invalid item links on the page now. Updating these would keep the page neat and clean!

Might I suggest adding a link to the Writing ML help doc that's on the left-hand toolbar because I lived on that page as a newbie and still do 6 years later. It's my most used link! {code:WritingML} WritingML Help


Additional Comments:

Great job with the Helping Links page. Such a useful page for newbie authors to WDC because it can be overwhelming with all of the wonderful resources available at our fingertips.

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Hello Brian K Compton ! I'm reviewing "Invalid Entry"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  as an entrant into "Invalid Item" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Oooh, I really liked this poem! It's different but really pulls me into the imagery you present and you dip well into the darkness with this piece even in love. It even has a dream-like feel to it that helps me swim through the lines nibbling at its meaning as I read through.

Conventions:

This is free-verse though there is a hint of structure to each stanza. extremely short syllabic lines coupled with longer lines that seem to state the obvious and make its point know.

Suggestions:

My only suggestion has to do with the capitalization of the first letter on every line. Some people do this on purpose. I have always done it on accident because google docs auto does it. I just want to point it out just in case you didn't do it on purpose. For me it's a bit of a distraction as capitals can represent emphasis but that's purely personal preference.


Favorite Parts:

I think the way the poem ends kinda blows my mind. I mean she seems to really be into the 3rd person she's speaking to in the poem but them we get to the end and she's like "well, if you can't feed me with love then maybe someone else can":



Additional Comments:

Well done! Welcome to "Invalid Item"  and good luck!

Keep On Writing!!

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Hello JCosmos ! I'm reviewing "wild things stole my heart "  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  as an entrant into "Invalid Item" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

The wild things are responsible for quite a bit when it comes to troubles aren't they? Factor in dreams and nightmares and the wild things run rampant in home territory where they can wreak the most havoc upon unsuspecting and broken people.

The wild things were no different for you, stealing your heart and teasing you as they toy with it.

Conventions:

Free-verse poem that uses short lines and stanzas to move through the poem quickly as the wild things steal and flee with his heart.

Suggestions:

A simple way to help with readability and flow of the poem, I suggest using punctuation to control how the reader reads your words. Capitalize the beginning of each point, use commas, periods, m-dashes, and ellipses to slow a reader for breaks and pauses.


Favorite Parts:

I think it's cute how you ended this poem with the wild things actually returning your heart and the love of your life dispelling the dream of the wild things.


Additional Comments:

Good luck in "Invalid Item"  and Keep on Writing!

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Hello Beholden ! I'm reviewing "My Funny Valentine"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  as an entrant into "Invalid Item" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Well, I have to say that at first all i could do was laugh my way through this piece as I read it. It reminds me of my son and how literal he is with everything. We really have to be careful because we're a sarcastic bunch.

Back to the joy of this poem, yes, I laughed as I imagined the writer being completely dumbfounded by this gesture of love and having no problem in voicing his very blunt opinion of how strange and odd all of this truly is. It made for quite the dark laugh. Thank you.


Conventions:

This poem was free-verse and infused with a ton of humor. Enjambment follows creating perfect pauses and breaks to give this poetic piece its poetic feel.

Suggestions:

Absolutely none, except keep that dark sense of humor!


Favorite Parts:

The whole tone of the poem makes it difficult to pick a favorite part. Each stumble across the doll's odd behavior is hilarity but if I have to pick then perhaps this part sticks out an iota more than the rest:



LMAO. Corpse disposal a heavy burden... ROFLMAO... oh, I love it.

Additional Comments:

I always love what you have to give us every time you enter into the contest. You always manage to entertain and this time was no different. Best of luck in "Invalid Item"  and please, Keep on Writing!.

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Hello New Year's Sox ! I'm reviewing "My heart"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  as an entrant into "Invalid Item" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Short, sweet, and incredibly relatable!

Every line of description is straight truth when it comes to dark feelings of love and heartbreak. The pain of being without you, remembering your touch, and begging to be free of it all.

Isn't the sad truth sometimes, though, that we don't really want to be relieved of the pain? Because then what did they mean in the first place, if you feel nothing anymore?

Conventions:

Free-verse poem with a repeated refrain every 3rd line - "My heart beats for you"

Suggestions:

Refrain - the purpose of a refrain is to drive home a point. This point is driven home using the lines in between each refrain for emphasis. Everything said in between each refrain should bolster the refrain itself specifically, making each time its repeated a stronger punch to the stomach than before. We must be sure and build-up this intensity carefully and not let it fall flat by the time we reach the end of our poem.

The lines in between each of your refrains, though meaningful and do bolster your refrain, are still too close together to pack the punch that I feel you want your refrain to have on your readers.

TO fix this either expand on the statements in between the current refrains you have, expanding your poem and making it longer or remove a couple of refrains from the current lines. Perhaps even just removing line #4 and leaving the rest, is enough to help give the refrain a boost, perhaps something like this:





Favorite Parts:

My favorite lines are:




This is so true. A touch can live on in memory for decades after it's occurred. So this line was very impactful for me personally.

Additional Comments:

Great job with this short poem. It's hard to write something impactful with feeling in so few words. Good luck in "Invalid Item"  and Keep on Writing!

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Hello ! I'm reviewing "The House Above the Sea"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2020" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

I've grown quite curious about the house above the sea. I feel teased about what's going on there. I'm catching a whisper of the terror that might be lurking there. We're given a lot of good hints to keep it mysterious and leave us feeling a bit more satisfied at the end knowing at least that if I am crazy enough to explore this place, I may as well bring a few more suitcases with me cause I'm staying awhile.

Conventions:

Repetition is the most used convention. There were two instances of inline rhyming in the first third of the poem, as well.

Suggestions:

I love repetition in poetry when trying to drive home a point, but too much can over take a poem and muddle the story and meaning of it. "In the house above the sea" is repeated almost every other line in the poem, accounting for almost half of the poem at 9 lines out of 20. That was a bit too much for me for a line that is simply a location. This location gains more meaning as the poem goes on from the words in between the repeated phrase. So, these words needs to be impactful and give oompf and power to your repeated phrase. The feelings you want to convey should be growing more intense every time it's repeated.

I think that since you chose to use short lines between repetitions, that perhaps spreading them out between lines as you build it up would help with this effect and help drive home the creepiness that can be derived from your great lines in-between.

I think elaborating more on the secrets and what may be lurking behind those false panels would also help build more to the creepiness of the house.


Favorite Parts:

I do love the lines you already have in place between your repeating phrase. They bring my mind to the door and have me reaching for the knob, so I was ripe for the emotional picking depending on the direction you want the creepiness factor to go.

Additional Comments:

I think this is a great starter poem and the framework is right there for you, just color in some more of the picture to drive home your repeated line and that'll polish it right up. Keep up the great work and Keep On Writing!

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Hello Tinker ! I'm reviewing 4 Dekaaz Form of the Week from Prompted by Poet's Place Cafe   today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

I need to get back over there to "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~"  and start practicing all these wonderful forms. Time just escapes me sometimes.

I LOVE what you did with these! I had to look up the form and its rules that were posted and each one you wrote had its own wonderful message in just 3 short lines and 10 syllables. It's truly amazing writing when you can get your message across in so few words.

#1 haiku - assuming you took from the fact that the Dekaaz form is to be spoken out loud and indeed this is a truth. I enjoyed reading each one out loud!

#2 Sunrise - I love the meaning behind this one and it's a hard one to remember and put into practice sometimes. New day, new beginnings, new chances at making it a great one in all sorts of ways!

#3 Woman - Well, hell, woman power! Yes speak your minds and stand together. These days it can be difficult with as cutthroat and competitive some women are with each other. I loved this powerful message.

#4 My man - Way to give the men a voice too! We are equals and should be heard and listened to. Another powerful message!

Additional Comments:

Great job taking this form and it's limitations and driving home some good messages with each. Good luck in finishing up all your endeavors for "I Write in 2019" !

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Hello IceSkatingSugarCube ! I'm reviewing "Cold Nights--Aquarian"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Hello fellow "Invalid Item"  writer! I enjoyed this short piece about cold nights and think you used the limited syllables to describe a perfect night in, indeed!

I myself quite enjoyed this unusual form and having to limit each line with required syllables wasn't quite as challenging as I thought it would be considering we didn't have to use a rhyme scheme and could make a quick story of it.

You followed all the requirements needed, though I do admit I wish you would've taken this a bit further and added another stanza or two to extend the description of such a perfect scenario!

That's my only nit-pick which really isn't one at all.


Additional Comments:

Great job with the Aquarian Form and best of luck in the "Invalid Item"  & "I Write in 2019"  challenges!!

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Hello Mastiff ,

I just read your short story "Gnash Steps Out" , which I found in the "I Write in 2019"  forums and wanted to share my personal thoughts with you.

Disclaimer: Please remember that the following suggestions are based off of my own opinion and personal interpretation of your work. Feel free to take and/or toss out any of my suggestions.





I enjoyed this piece of flash fiction personifying the gargoyle. I have been mulling over my own piece for this and it was wonderful to view another entry for it.

I really enjoyed the point of view you placed within this piece with him over-hearing everything around him and how it made him feel.

Giving him his own desire to be set free from his initial design was a wonderful touch along with hatred and view of those around him.

Your ending was quite delightful as well. It made me laugh in joy for Gnash to not only get his wish but to take out a few of those who annoyed him as well.




Only error I saw was this sentence:

Perhaps that was the reason the son had added the him, a Gothic feature, to the building.

I think "the" was a simple typing error.




Great entry! Good luck in "Invalid Item"  and all of your endeavors for "I Write in 2019" !!

I enjoyed reading your work and hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

Hello Lilli is QUILLING! }! I'm reviewing Hunger from My 24 Syllable Notebook  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review on my own personal interpretation of your work. Please, do not feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Hahaha! I read this poem with such a pretentious attitude and stuffy demeanor that all I could do was laugh. Like I imagine a version of Cruella Deville, her pointy nose in the air, scoffing at the idea.

Plus, I totally get it. Yeah, you're hungry but do you really want to eat at a filthy establishment? I don't know, cause sometimes the worst hole in the walls can have the best food!!

Conventions:

This was written for "Invalid Item"  contest and you stayed within the requirements keeping the poem at a maximum of 24 syllables and using the prompt word of the day, providing us with a note of it's meaning at the bottom. Well done!

Suggestions:

Keep a snack in your purse for times like this, that's my suggestion.


Additional Comments:

Nicely done, Lilly. I love the challenge of 24 Syllables and you created quite the humorous piece for it. I don't know if that was your intention but every time I read it, I can't help but giggle. I hope you won "Invalid Item"  and I wish you luck in all your endeavors for "I Write in 2019" .

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Hello IceSkatingSugarCube ! I'm reviewing Halloween--Luc Bat from Pretty Ugly Words  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review on my own personal interpretation of your work. Please, do not feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

First off, I have to admit I was excited to read your poem because I am quite intimidated by this form for "Invalid Item" . I have been staring at a blank page for a few days now and reading your poem has given me some encouragement!

That being said, Bravo! You did a wonderful job of incorporating the sense of both Fall and Halloween into this difficult poem. I also love that you added the black and orange Fall/Halloween color scheme to add to the sense of the season.

Conventions:

You stuck to the requirements of the Luc Bat form like a champ and managed to mix in the rhyme scheme without making it so blatantly obvious that it was difficult to read. As a matter of fact, all of the rhyming components flowed smoothly, were flawless, and practically unnoticeable. If I hadn't been looking for them to see your technique, I'm not sure I would've even been able to put my finger on what worked so well with this poem for this form.

Suggestions:

Meh, no real suggestions, just something to throw out there to be a naggy nit-pick:

Centering this poem would be aesthetically pleasing in my opinion, especially with the contrast in colors. It would appear to be "FALLing" down the page.

Told you it as a nit-pick, seriously it doesn't matter, just a suggestion to make a suggestion.



Favorite Parts:

As funny as it may sound, "vampire tooth" was my favorite part. I don't know why, because it's kind of thrown in there willy nilly for syllable count reasons. It's not a completely smooth transition from "donned in capes" to describe the visual of the kids in costume but it really worked and popped for me because of this hard contrast.

It really made it more poetic and fun.


Additional Comments:

Simply a wonderful job creating this Fall-fantastic and fun poem with such a difficult form to tackle.

I wish you the best of luck in "Invalid Item"  and in all of your endeavors for "I Write in 2019" .

Keep On Writing!

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Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating ! I'm reviewing Birthday Card With Gifts from Snow's Writing for 2019, 2020, & Beyond  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Creating a birthday-themed poem for a greeting card is no simple task. This was a wonderful challenge and you did a good job encompassing so much for the celebration of WDC 19th Birthday!

Conventions:

This Round of "The Random Poetry Contest"  challenged you to write a 19 line poem of any form desired. You chose to use rhyming quatrains with a monorhyme triplet to complete the requirements.

Your rhymes perfect and followed your chosen form covering the celebration, gifts, and their meanings throughout.

Suggestions:

There were just a couple of lines I think I saw errors on:

"Raise your voice exultation,"

I think should be:
"Raise your voice in exultation,"

"Today you turn nineteen year old,"

I think should be:
"Today you turn nineteen years old,"

I believe there are a couple of commas that do not need to be in some of the lines in the final stanza, but punctuation is so complicated in poetry I don't like to correct it.

Just to make the poem a little more visually uniform, the monorhyme triplet would feel more fitting as the final stanza, though the current lines, of course, would not work as far as story order.

Once again, poetic freedom, not really an issue just something that popped in my mind as I read it.


Additional Comments:

Good job, Neva! You are able to write so many different styles of poems and it's wonderful to see all the different styles and topics covered.

Keep On Writing!

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Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating ! I'm reviewing "Inner Vision"  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !

I also want you to know that I realize for some, poetry is a very personal experience, and some criticism can be taken personally.

Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Based on the "Sight" prompt from "SENIOR CENTER FORUM" , you ironically explore that which is seen when one closes their eyes. This gives a unique view into the endless possibilities of your personal imagination.

I enjoy how you begin this poem with that actual shutting of your eyes, move forward with the inner visions of actual light and shadow occurring because of the physical act, then move through the poem as these dualities form a larger picture in your imagination and ultimately create a whole new world.

Conventions:

It is written in free verse and the stanzas are separated accordingly as we move through the stages I mentioned above

Additional Comments:

Great job on taking the "Sight" prompt to an internal sight that we all can relate to.

Best of luck in the August Contest in "SENIOR CENTER FORUM"  and all your endeavorrs for "I Write in 2019" .

Keep On Writing!

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