I loooved it. I am a nerd so it sort of made it more real. you did really well and you should continue this story, I would love to see where you lead it. The basic story was good and so was your grammar and spelling, so keep it up!! Write on, you're on your way to the top!!
wow, that was AWESOME I loved this story. you did really well with this and I hope to read more from you. Everything was A-okay. Your flow of events, your grammar, your spelling everything! keep it up!! like I said I hope to here more from you! write on!;D
Holly crap, this is an awsome poem. I would recomend this to anybody. where did you get the idea for this anyway? This poem has averything a poem could want. I definitely look forward to reading more poetry by you. Write on, Dan Sturn, your on your way to the top!
I really enjoyed this poem. It had alot of feeling and you portrayed the story very well. You also had no problems in the way of grammar and spelling and that is very good on a reader. keep it up because it is a good skill. Write on, Simple Dykie, you can do it.
This is a very good emotional piece. It was very well written as well. Your spelling and grammar were great and don't even get me started on the timing! Good job with that, because it will take you up to the top. Write on, Tim Chiu, your on your way to the top!
How true this is. Most of the time it is like that in a home.This is a very good idea for a poem. Good job on everything, and that would include spelling. That is a good thing to be good at as a writer. Keep on writing, Tim Chiu, your good at this stuff
This was a good story and you did an excellent job with it. You described everything really well and you had no spelling or grammatical errors that
I could see. You remembered this story very well, Carl definetely must have left a big impression. Keep on writing, cuzzin cecil, your good.
I enjoyed reading your poem Tim Chiu. This was a very descriptive poem and it deffinetely captures the hard, easy, and fun parts of bowling. You did very well on this poem and you should be proud. This poem also had great rhythm and beat and I hope to read more of your work.
This is a truly touching poem. I enjoyed it very much. I would like to comment on how lifelike it was. It sounded Like a true event that really happened. I hope that you can write more poems like this. Keep writing, jackneigut, your on the way to the top.
This was a good story. It had a really good storyline to it and it also had great grammar and spelling. I liked that it was mature but not overly so. The part where the mood sort of flips when myra started laughing was an interesting part but the conflict was resolved at the same time. I look forward to part 2. Keep writing, you did good!
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