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Review of Engagement  Open in new Window.
Review by cutesmile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed the poem! The line:
I’ve dreamed of this moment
I wonder if "dreamt" would work, though the spell check on this does not seem to like it! LOL So, maybe I just don't know what I'm talking about.
I like the humor of the knock knock joke, too. You did a great job. :)
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Review by cutesmile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
What a great start! I would be interested in reading more. Thank you for sharing your talent. :)
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Review of The Hurt  Open in new Window.
Review by cutesmile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I am not sure what the assignment was, but I can understand the feelings of sitting in class (high school, especially) and facing the heartache of a relationship gone sour.
There are a couple of typos, for instance in the first line Sittind instead of sitting, but they're easy to fix.
Also, I would use the word "about" instead of "bout" . I'm a spelling freak, so that is what stands out to me. However, I do feel the emotion and I can imagine myself back in high school, sitting in the same class as someone who has hurt me, and dealing with those difficult feelings.
Thank you for sharing your work!
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Review of Tears  Open in new Window.
Review by cutesmile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing such heartfelt words!
I wondered about this line:
"Who will dare take a stand with my and live with me in peace?"
It seems like a typo, but what is missing?
I love the line:
"With God as my witness and the hearer of my cries"
What a blessing it is to pour our souls out to God. Thank you for sharing!
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