terrificoque! terrificoque! This was beautiful and but hinted with laces of sorrow. I think we all reach a peak in life where we start to wonder where God is and start to doubt out faith. I have not to long ago doubted myself but then I found it once again in a recent turn of events :) You have a gift to write a piece that connects deeply. Bravo.
Amazing :) All I have to say is wonderful! I liked this story so much I bookmarked it so I could read it anytime~ Hehe. Your grammar was spot on and your approach had hit the mark. I will be absolutely read this on the plane back to Norway :) Terrific job Tom A+
O.O OH MAH GAWD!! That was one heck of a story! I wish there was another Chapter! Seeing L.B and the girls in the room was tense! I also like how Christina was a medium and the thing about the Gods =D The ending though, now that my friend, was suspenseful! I tell you this, it did keep me on the edge of my seat =D And I'm on the floor, so that tells you everything =D
Cool!! I like how everything is falling into place! And love the name 'Daniil' it is awesome =D Well technically I love all the names on here XD I can't wait to read the next part!! I really like though, it is defiantly original and has a flare to it =)
I like the time skips! Even though it was constantly skipping you didn't overwork anything! It might have been a constant time skip but that didn't pull me away or make me say "Stop skipping!!" Actually, it was very interesting, and brought to you by the characters too =) I love it!! And the ending, the ending was very genius! Good job!
Awwww this was so breath taking and a bit sad! I love you depth in the story! It is, how you say, enlightening! I really love how you blended all of the sorrowful and tragedy into one but came out as a beautiful sad joy in the end =) It is a rare occasion I see that =D Good work and keep writing! A++!!!
Ohhhhh things are coming to par!! I like where this is going!! Are you making another Chapter? I would love to read the next one when it comes out!! Do please let me know when it comes out, I love how things are going and I also love Luca's full name! It's very creative and beautiful =D
Whoaaaaaaa! An obsession you say? Oh Luca >:D Hohohohoho!!! Things are getting very interesting!! My favorite line was "It was beyond love, it was beyond attraction, it was pure obsession." That got me on the edge >:D And whiny mom? yup, sounds like my grandma/nana XD Love the worry wart =D
I love the fiery corpse scene! How you described the hollow sockets and teeth scene =D I'm going to go to the next Chapter because I really want to see who is this voice! The prologue indeed draw me in =) Now I shall read the next one! It shall be very exciting! :D
Oooooh!!! I like this one!! It all rhymes!!! but makes sense at the same time!! *gasps* hey! that rhymed too! :D You did really awesome!! It's not to often that I see when things rhyme but makes sense all in one :D
I can't remember if I read this one but if I didn't then I would like to say that you did a very very great job!! It's such a lovely thing =D Great job!
This is such a wonderful tribute it left me teary I at the end TT_TT You have such a wonderful gift for writing that it is truly inspiring! Well done. Well done.
You know this was a great story! The idea is very interesting =D My favorite part was "Ralph is gone. He died to save me. I have crossed a line I never wanted to cross. Is it really going to be worth it in the end?" Sad, but lovely :) Is there more to this?
Awwww I read this item to my little sister =D she loved it!!! I also want to say that you did great job :) It's nice to read a wholesome children's story :D
First off, 'Keynan' such a cool name =D
Second off, this deserves more stars!!
and third, I love this story because it almost reminds me of a game called 'Singularity' =D so awesome it was!
but pass that this story is awesome!
P.S. my favorite line was "When he turned over the eight of diamonds that he had drawn, he ran his tongue across the inside of his upper lip to hide the smile that wanted to appear, forgetting for the moment , flying, missions, war and even the letter from Klara in the top pocket of his flight suit. He was about to win the pot of the evening."
great story! I really should of been reading this when I stayed in the hospital =D This would have made my day a lot easier XD but good job though! You my friend serve a smiley and a A++ for all of you great rhyming skills and hard work =D great job!
You know I really don't read 'medical' stories but this one was soooo touching! I think adding the sweet card bit at the end really made my day =D I am now a fan to this adorable story! Also favorite line:It was not just cancer he needed recovery from. Rather the years of negativeness that had seeped into his life like a cancer.
This poem was very soft and sad, but it was so bright in the end =) I think you did very well! You do have a strong passion for writing, and let it live on :)
I like you! It's really great to see another Christian who is expressive! I do say that things has become real tough now in these days, but we all have to stick together! As it says in revelations that the lord shall be coming soon and we all must be ready! Things will be looking up =)
srmgkergnjewngie!!!!!!!!!! Got damn it! this is the second most depressing story I read today!!! And when having cramps it doesn't make it better! -mumbles about crying in a bucket- just perfect, another tear jerker TT_TT
I am very pleased by this fine piece of work that was put out! Indeed it was thrilling!!! I find it very awesome to find a person who also writes about a devil =D I too am writing about a devil! only he's five! but pass that I think this story was very thrilling and it suited my interest and captivated me =) I give you A++!!
I found this story very thrilling beyond words! it has made my inner Chuck Norris crap his pants =D It almost reminds me of a game I have called The Suffering! You did very well though! The spelling, punctuation and dialogue was very much on par! I shall read this story again when it is night where I live =D I just love the horror, and you my friend nailed it all the way!! A++!!! and great job! =D
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