wow. I'm impressed. I could never write like that at fourteen and now after two whole years all my writings make me crack up. But this is wonderful.Great plot,wonderful meaning,and very deep.some sentences are too detailed somewhere and i think a few indirect sentences maybe, good just so you the meaning could be more hidden therefore more deep. But by a fourteen year old,its very refreshing. No twilight, no unrequited vamp love, just plain good old sense and meaning. Love it.
Beautiful it is and very deep. It makes you think of betrayal and love. It definitely made me think of my past and I felt a bit of tears build up.
You knew how to play up the emotions with words and its rare that i see something like this.
I really don't see anything i can criticize but I am no professional author. But i must say write on!
good luck =D
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.10 seconds at 7:32am on Nov 26, 2024 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
