Dear Jini: I think you wrote a very good poem, one in which many people can relate to. Ah, unrequited love, we've all been there. The words also flow quite well.
The only line that I thought you might want to consider revising was "The only love of mine," for though it may have felt that way at the time to the speaker, she will hopefully some day feel differently. I'd want to give her (I assume it's a her) that hope.
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