I really did enjoy the tragedy in this poem. You have a knack for wonderful imagry and it trully paints the real picture of their sorrow. I also thought your last stanza rounds the poem off quite nicely. This one thigns that aggrivated me a little was the line "Double blow hurts like no other..." to the end of the stanza. i just thought that was a tad cheezy. I took me out of the moment of the poem, you coul possibly just make it more of an image rather than telling me "double blow hurts like no other" for instance, where she felt it, her cheeck, her hip, her heart? Other wise, fantastic poem!
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