Good start! You've established a good world and some interesting characters, but be careful of falling into stereotypes. For example, does the bouncer have to be a former Crip? Why not a former rodeo clown? Or a former member of the Backstreet Boys? Or Gary Coleman?
Keep up the good work! I'm interested in seeing where this leads!
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