Beautiful poem. Wonderfully written. Sometimes we don't realize what we have until we lose it. Once we've lost it, sometimes, it's too late. If it is meant to be, it will happen again.
Absolutely beautiful. Great writing. Your story hit home in a time when hundreds of thousands of mothers are afraid of receiving the same call. I am a father and it was none the less traumatic for me. I have a son who, fortunately, came home. Very emotional piece of writing. You have a wonderful talent. You should write a book.
Nice piece of prose writing. You might consider making your sentences a little shorter, and not beginning every line with a capitol.
Actually, this had a great start that might make an excellent full length novel. Have you thought of that? I would read it. Let me know if you decide to make it into a book. Keep up the great writing.
A great poem. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I might add though, you might want to use punctuation. It allows the reader to quickly see the end of a thought or idea. It also allows for a smoother transition from one thought to another.
Absolutely beautiful. If you never believe anything anybody ever says to you, believe this; beauty is within. True beauty is not seen on the surface, where it can be manipulated with creams, gels, makeup, etc. True beauty comes from within. You have a beautiful soul and it shows in your writing.
Don't look in the mirror and judge your beauty by what others think or say. Close your eyes and look within your heart. That is where you will find your beauty.
I know it's hard not to listen to what others say to you or about you, but you have to try. You true beauty will start to come out for all to see when you accept the fact that their actions or remarks do not take away your beauty.
That nonsense about karma is ridiculous. Take Jesus for example. He did nothing but love us all. He performed miracles and all he wanted was for everyone to love each other. And he was killed because of it.
The past shows us that human beings do not exercise good sense when dealing with others. Remember that the next time you look in the mirror.
When all is said and done, what others think about you really doesn't matter. What does matter is what you think of yourself. And don't let others tell you what to think of yourself.
A great poem. I really enjoyed reading it. It might be better to write it as you would a regular story. Use periods at the end of each thought. It isn't necessary to start each line with a capitol letter. A single thought can be carried over from one line to the next. When that happens you can either use a comma, if it is warranted, or just begin the next line with no punctuation at the end of the previous line.
I would love to read more of your writings. Keep it up.
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