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Review by DA McGarrity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is pretty good... I kind of did an edit below if you want to check it out... Sometimes in poetry, we can get rid of certain words.

**A slither of silvery light swathes,
Surface of a darkened grey lake
A mirror to the world above,
Craggy stack submerged in the black
From out the blue comes a waking wind
Scores of crisp; like tears spiral downwards,
Before resting atop their shadowy likeness
For a moment, a dismal symmetry exists
A fat carp rises
Gulps
Sinks…
Swallowing the tears in the wake of its dive.**
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