Dale Ricky's (dalericky) Reviews

Dale Ricky

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#4804670

Review of Chapter 1: Raid Sevilla

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Speaking as a casual reader, I had to stop and make some popcorn. The read is slow yet interesting enough to keep going. I have mixed thoughts about the dialog. The characters speak in plain, clear English. Speeking clearly makes reading pleasant but takes away from the atmosphere. Which would be best? As much as I liked the clear speech, a peppering of Viking words might deepen the illusion.

I am 50/50 on this, so take it as a thought. You need a second opinion.

What happens next? The end of chapter one had me wondering: What happens next for Grimolf, Bjorn, and Ulf? If there were more pages, I would have turned them.

Your efforts are well spent. The adventure is afoot, so to speak. I wish you the best of luck and encourage you to keep on writing.

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#4804399

Review of Random Acts of Poetry

for entry "The Right Button"

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Excellent

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#4796312

Review of Scarlet

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Yes, that is a little dark. The descriptions paint a visible picture. I could see what was going on. As you stated, the subject matter isn't for everyone. Overall, it's a well-written story. Well enough, it leaves to the imagination what could happen next. One more sentence could be a thought describing the laundry soup being opened or poured into the water. The commercial implies it, but the action could carry it through. Keep writing.

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#4786929

Review of I Want To Be Me

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: E

| (4.5)

You are off to a good start. I feel your passion.

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#4780264

Review of A Love Letter from the Boogeyman

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Well written, I enjoyed the read. A fun story that reads like you have more to share. You left me wondering what happens next. A good hook. Thank you for sharing.

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#4775443

Review of Forever and Always

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

A good chapter 1. I am interested in chapter 2. Well written. Good grammar. Keep writing this story. You are on to a good read.

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#4768594

Review of Hungry for Link's Feet

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

A well written and well told story. Grammar and spelling is excellent. Keep writing.

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#4765762

Review of JFK, still standing tall

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Keep writing you told a compelling characterization from history. I learned something and that is what you were going for, well done. There are a few dings on grammar.

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#4765751

Review of The Elemental Chronicles Chapter 2

Review by Dale Ricky

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Reads smooth. However, it seems the last paragraphs are missing. Consider breaking Blaze's description up and spreading the details into the following paragraphs. Instead of two leading sentences.