Well written, I enjoyed the read. A fun story that reads like you have more to share. You left me wondering what happens next. A good hook. Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing you told a compelling characterization from history. I learned something and that is what you were going for, well done. There are a few dings on grammar.
Reads smooth. However, it seems the last paragraphs are missing. Consider breaking Blaze's description up and spreading the details into the following paragraphs. Instead of two leading sentences.
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