Yes, that is a little dark. The descriptions paint a visible picture. I could see what was going on. As you stated, the subject matter isn't for everyone. Overall, it's a well-written story. Well enough, it leaves to the imagination what could happen next. One more sentence could be a thought describing the laundry soup being opened or poured into the water. The commercial implies it, but the action could carry it through. Keep writing.
Well written, I enjoyed the read. A fun story that reads like you have more to share. You left me wondering what happens next. A good hook. Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing you told a compelling characterization from history. I learned something and that is what you were going for, well done. There are a few dings on grammar.
Reads smooth. However, it seems the last paragraphs are missing. Consider breaking Blaze's description up and spreading the details into the following paragraphs. Instead of two leading sentences.
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