This is a good piece, imaginative and well versed. I like how you took much of the lore of the Phoenix and incorporated it into the piece. I like the style and the art. You created a rhyme scheme and stuck to it. I see no obviuos mispellings or mistakes in grammar. Overall a great piece and I'm glad I got to read it.
I like this piece a lot. I like the message and wholeheartedly agree with it. Which is why I get myself into some pretty good pickles some times...lol. I always say whats on my mind and have no issue debating any subject that I have the slightest knowledge on.
I'm not quite sure the piece is actually a poem... having a hard time placing it really. Anyways, loved it, loved the message and I'll be looking for more work by you soon.
This is a good piece. I think a little more form would have helped this piece, however, it's good as it is as well. You express yourself well though I think a more varied vocabulary might make this piece punch a little more. You show the connection between you and the subject, even in the disconnected emotions which drives the piece.
Overall, I liked it. Keep it up!
" Let your imagination take flight! "
Daedalus
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