Hi Brenda
Your song is tender and touching. After a first reading, I read the description and read your beautiful words a second time. Truly, a loving gift.
Great satire. As with all satire, exaggeration is key; to that issue, you have done an excellent job. With an informed voting public, you will have four more years of President Trump's great leadership to write about.
The 5 stars are for the writing, not the message.
Hi, Bob
Excellent. You wrote a beauty. I look for something to correct or expand upon when I R&R. What a pleasure it was to find nothing but a great and well written little gem.
This bit of ghoulish fun will be with me on my future camping trips. Thanks (lol). The way you went about building what I knew was going to happen, but hoped would not was perfect. Great stuff.
Are you suggesting that those poor kids should collectively take the gas pipe?
I hope your message is directed at those sorrowful adults who have done little to promote independent thinking and leadership.
All I was able to conclude from perusing your words is how unhappy you are. for that alone I feel obliged to cheer you with a few GPs, and do try to enjoy what He has given you; I am certain He is sad that you are not happy with where you are.
Your words to some are fighting; especially the last line. But to others, like me who do not believe words written thousands of years ago to put meaning to unanswered questions are a rational way to live a life. I appreciate your message. I find sonnets to be most difficult to create. I applaud your efforts.
The guy in your tale has a problem. He rips himself a new one, and then, from what I can pull from your words, turns his back on who he knows he is with no intent on making the changes you so perfectly outlined.
I enjoyed your poem, but found the rhythm off, making it not the smoothest of reads. I am by no means a poet, but I do understand that there is more to a poem than rhyming lines. That being said, your poem is probably a better piece of work than I am an aficionado of the art.
Hi Mom,
This is a sweet and warm tale that will surely touch the hearts of young and not so young alike. Snow Fairy is beautifully written and delivers, a meaningful message. Thanks for sharing.
Very clever. Well thought out. Why am I rating this 4.5? I'm changing my rating to 5! "Through The Jungle Lightly" is a fun read to be enjoyed over and over again.
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