Bravo! Human in th raw & real. I love the style in which ya wrote this piece. Involving the reader in the poem gives it a lasting presence. In question form, the reader can identify with it on a personal level, let it linger in the soul. I love poetry- always have. Must admit I am not the best at writings do's & dont's, or the hundreds of different styles. I see poetry as an expression of one's self & life's many jouneys one can take. I am also a mother of four & know all too well of the games life can play. The "why's" of one's mind can tug at the soul with such strength...sorry I'm rambling- my mind wonders on. At last that in itself is the key- you have written a good write if it sparks others emotions as much as it has your. Keep up your writing... I will continue to surf round your port! thanks for the reads...Crystaldreams
Wonderful write- Innocence captures our children in such a true light. We all could definently use a touch of childish magic in this day and time. Bravo- Crystaldreams
Great write! I love your line...a field of poppies on the way to OZ... a line to spark the minds eye indeed. The only suggest I could offer- take out all punctuation. I have been told from others here that it overall looks better to have it all or none in punctuation within poetry. Some lines have it & others don't- only my suggest. Awsome write, thanks for sharing! Crystaldreams
Very nice for such a short write. Could easily be transformed into a novel. Story has a strong base - a tale worth telling. I found myself wanting to know more upon Ezra's early life & the many struggles that lay within one's mind. Nice job over-all, great expressons, flow & pace of the story are excellent. Many thanks for the read!......crystaldreams
Bravo! Life is a story paved with the passages one takes. Which ever path one takes, another stepping stone in lifes lessons can be found. crystaldreams
Poems are tiny spotlights- giving words their own special apperance. Great poem- good flow & use of expressions that made me wonder if I was upon that as well ...Thanks for the read! crystaldreams
Well- well -this one is Grand. Love the mention of Roland searching his dark towers, of the minds compeling games. One of my fav series! This write is more than just a poem, it's an expression of ones soul. Might I dare to ask your sign? -lets one know how one sees things. So many simularities in our views, this one hit home- full circle. Thanks for the awsome read......crystaldreams
This one has merit- some extra care add to it & great it may be. Not to step on toes- just a few suggestions. Capitalization & punctuation are not required in poetry- but the poems flow goes much easier if it is used on all lines- or none at all. The combo of both confusses the reads focus. thanks for the read, crystaldreams
Compeling read, great comparisons. I like the way it flows with no structure & form- but as a statement from the soul......thanks for the read-crystaldreams
Talk about taking a girls breath away.... Amazing write. Not only are they words of great meaning- but the poems flow & structure is just as well done. This one has earned it's 5! Thanks for the read-crystaldreams
"Bravo" on such a wonderful write! Your poem definitely deserved it's place upon the newsletter.
To have loved or been loved is marked upon the soul, but to wonder what if love, scars the soul forever.
Thank you for the read! Crystaldreams
Wonderful write! I love this dual thought style & story- that spirials into one perfect poem. Combining both thoughts- felt by two souls love, gave this poem emotions the reader can grasp.Excellent read-crystaldreams
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