Personally, I like this poem more than the other one that I've read by you. However, I did find a typo. "Making me holder you tighter." to "Making me hold you tighter." And one other thing.
"Then you awake.
You stare deep in to my mind,"
I think it would be better if it was "Then you awake, staring deep in to my mind".
The things I liked were your word usage, the flow, and the imagery. A good write and much enjoyed.
This is a good poem with a nice flow and nice word usage. I like the fact that it's punctuated. It also has good emotion. The only thing I didn't like about it was that the word "you" seemed to be used a bit too much and in the verse "You said you didn't mean too," "too" should be "to". Other than that, it was a delightful read. Nice write.
As i read this I was thinking, And he thought my poems were good. This is really really good. The one poem I've read by you and it makes me want to read more of them. The color brings it out more, your word usage is fantastic, and... I absolutely love this. Wonderfully written and very much enjoyed.
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