Pink slippers, They are. When you say, pink slippers, I imagined a person with only pink slippers.! Even I felt scary when I read your story. An old lady relentlessly following 3 little boys. It was hilarious to imagine how far you have to run and how many turns and twists you have to do to avoid that little, old lady. But then even at home waiting to hear the doorbell sounds to answer a call of an old lady!
Very interesting. Words were flowing like a river. Congratulations on your skilled writing.
Hi,
Your title drew me to this article. I was curious to know what it was.
I read the amusing story. How, in need of a potato, a person met with an accident. The writer presents a detailed, humorous and, heart-rending story of how the potato came to be. He reminds us that many things we take for granted has a very disturbing and ugly past wrought in tears and sighs.
Normally when I read articles like this with no dialogues, I skip many sentences and hurriedly read the gist. But here, I couldn't do it and read form top to bottom.The writer is a very good craftsman and I wish you all the best for your future endeavours.
It's a simple yet beautiful poem. The mentor, Tess stands in the kitchen and gives cooking lessons to a small boy.She teaches cooking is not only a task but it should be done with your heart.
The boy was flown away by the culinary expertise of Tess and he looks up to her as a Goddess.
I enjoyed the poem very much. It's a no-nonsense poem. Reveals the point of view of a child. Congratulations! Hope you will be able to more poems like this.
Very funny. I like reading about cooking. Though I dislike mundane, daily cooking it arouses my senses to read beautifully prepared dishes which you feel gulping down at once.
When preparing fancy dishes for special occasions, I too keep a note and refer it or or run to my desk top in the room and run back to the kitchen numerous times.
The poem is full of visuals. I visualize a boy who tries to make something for the first time with mama's instructions. In such occasions,, normally something goes missing or something is forgotten until the last time.
That's very true.
The poem is nicely written. I like the style of writing like a rap. Thank you for letting me read your poem and thank you for inspiring to write article related to food.
It's very beautiful. I felt I was reading a narrative. Narrating a story through a poem is difficult but by making it a rhymed couplet you have taken a bigger challenge. The story of Atlantis is a famed one which we have many times. But you have created a character-Grace by giving a nice twist to the story. I don't know whether it is real or fictional but if it is real,sorry for my ignorance.
The poem has a cinematic components in it. I can easily imagine making a film with Grace as the leading lady and it will be a killer.
Normally we are instructed not to say only the good things in a poem but to pinpoint weak points too. Unfortunately though I tried hard I couldn't find any. So, thank u for letting me read this poem.
This is the strangest cat story I have ever read! All the time we read cat stories about adorable, purry cats, but oh boy, hoe different this one is.The sentence, "Every time I woke up during the night to check on her she was still sitting bolt upright staring at me." brought a smile to my lips as an image of a haughty cat floated before my eyes.
All the usual actions done by a normal cat is rejected by Lucy and instead,she has her own world.The writer has created a unique character of an aloof cat which makes the reader to yearn for more actions by the protagonist.
It is amusing to read the reactions of the friend after taking the adorable cat home.The reader already knows what's he dealing with and waits to see the aftermath with a knowing smile.
Though it is a biography, it is highly interesting and I wanted to read more about LUCY, THE ARROGANT.
Thank u for letting me read this beautiful story and whether it is fictional or true, I enjoyed it to the fullest.
How beautiful! I have no words to describe the craftsmanship of your short story. When I checked it, it was just a part of a long fiction, but there is no obstruction to enjoy this specific piece as a separate story. This is wonderful, especially the language. I re-read the first few paragraphs again and noticed how you developed the story gradually with each new sentence as a mason builds a wall.Each new sentence reveals more about the story and it flows smoothly and fitted well with the earlier sentence.Not a single word is wasted and all the adjectives and adverbs were necessary to build the plot. The building of the atmosphere and the characters, there whereabouts, and all the necessary details are well fitted into the story.
Though I shun away from reading long stories, this was an exception. I read this in one breath and reread to examine your writing closely to improve my writing. It's very innovative and I hope to read the full story in future. Thank you for letting me read your story.
thank u very much for the poetry writing advice. Though, I, myself is writing poems during last two or three years, I am still unable to master the delicate art of poetry writing. As I have been a self learner on the subject without any academic knowledge (if,barely).You have given an illustrated explanation which includes all the basic components of a poem. I was delighted to see it. I would like to know, whether there are any follow ups?
Yes. That's true. I know it very well as I too am the only child.You are very emotional when it comes to sharing and caring.You don't know any limits and you want everything to yourself as you are very selfish.You don't feel others' pain and suffering.
Yet, you love passionately and cling to what you believe. You are very difficult to change.
I think you have mapped correctly the mind of a single child in a family.
First of all, I wish you a happy new year, socalscribe!
It was good to read a piece of wring of yours again.
When I came to the last part of your writing, I had to read the former paragraphs again to understand the true meaning of the murder's words. Your story is beautifully crafted and you keep the reader letting believe the guilt of the convict to the last few lines and gives a sudden twist to it changing the readers' perspective of the victim and leaving a suspense about the true killer and her future actions. The convict's writing adds curiosity and mystery to the story.
Very short paragraphs and short sentences make it easier to read and understand the story, as many of the stories I've read consist lengthy sentences and large paragraphs! I enjoyed it very much and may God grant u the wisdom to write many more pieces like this!
Thank you for letting me read this.
What courage you must have to be a paramedic!I was not fortunate enough to witness with it my own eyes, I have seen in films, how they come to rescue a person or treat the wounded in shootings.
One must have a great courage to act swiftly in dangerous situations where many of us cower.Risking one's life to save another, actually it is something I could never dream of doing.
As you say, you must have faith in God and I am sure God has guided your hand numerous times to bring a smile to a mother's face and to relive a family from their suffering.
We all know that God tests endurance and patience from the ones he loves most and I think that he is testing you with your illness to see how deep your faith is.
Cancer is a horrible disease to a sufferer and his or her loved ones but as the creator of Earth, God has the privilege to take it back or not. What we can do is abide by his rules and not to lose faith.
I wish you a quick relief with your illness and may God grant you the grace to bear everything with a peace of mind.
Your poem gives heart warming feelings to its recipient. Though its common to all of us falling sick from time to time the poet has shown concern for his friend over his sore throat.
It is written in a down to earth manner and encourages the sick person to bear it up as it would pass gradually, however uncomfortable it is for the moment.
The third verse has a nice twist and brings a smile to the reader with the advice given to the 'friend'.
It's a very nice poem and I enjoyed it thoroughly.
It's a very interesting piece of dialogue and I read it at one breath. I am yet to find the art of writing through dialogues.
The story reveals little by little when we read the dialogue. Each line reveals something new about the characters and the reader get to know what is happening and who are talking. It's like reading a short story with thousands of words. Your diction is very simple but it reveals a murder in a very simple form. To me, there's no grammar mistakes in your writing and I enjoyed it thoroughly
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I selected a random review and your fiction popped up. Curious to read it as it was very short and looked mysterious. I read it only once and idea was very clear.
Before writing anything, I checked your portfolio and got a mental picture of you.Though you are new to writing, as you say, your writing does not look like anything written by a novice. It shows clarity and to my eyes, a well versed prose.
Very, very simple yet highly interesting. Actually, to me there' are no mistakes to be pinpoint and it's a nice piece of writing which stays in your memory for some time.
Thank u for letting me read it.
YES.That's a very inspirational poem.Many times I have fallen to a depressed state due to many reasons. but when you have new hopes and aspirations, the feeling of rising from the ashes come and then you have a reason to live.
The poem, tells us not to disappoint of our failures as they lead us to our victories. We have to be patient in life, as God won't give us whatever we want then and there. We have to bear anguish, bite our nails and wait until the right time.
This is good advice and I really appreciate it. The simplicity of the poem has won my heart.
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I read your poem and its contents made me review it. It is an unusual contrast.The War God, Apollo and John Keats are bound by your words. Very extraordinary metaphor! I especially like your metaphor for Apollo. 'Great silver-tongued wordsmith.' It creates a vivid imagery before my eyes. Apollo standing in front of you in his silver armour. Your ultimate desire to be a veteran poet is expressed in the poem. It's theme is very innovative and I like it very much and wish I could write like you, creating thousands of feelings in few, tiny words! Congratulations.
It's amusing but I too have wanted to cook an egg on the hot, tar road. You were lucky to have a mom like yours who understands the feeling of their children.
The story is very simple and it's life span is about 20 minutes. A very simple incident is created from a very simple idea and it's amusing, educative and it is a very entertaining one. I like your piece of writing very much. I have to say according to my knowledge, there are no grammar mistakes.
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Your story is very tragic.It brought a lump to my throat at the end.Yes. I agree with you. We tend to look at homeless like they are a disease. We never think for a moment that they too have feelings, and the desire to lead a better life. Your story opens our eyes to the plight of poor in the society. Many are better than us and try to help others when they are in trouble It's pathetic how they are treated by bullies and I think you are trying to point out the society ignore their duty to fellow humans. Happy writing..
When I browse your portfolio, the title of this poem drew me to it.I was curious to read who our everyday heroes are.Yes. It is true. while giving recognition for the people who have done great things for humanity, we forget ordinary people, who do the same without grumbling or complaining continuously, day in and day out.As you say how a wife of a sodier suffer once he returns from active service as a disabled person. After some time , all forget about him but the wife looks after him and manage to run the family as usual filling her heart with sorrow.
There are so many generous people who do things for others without noticed by others and without expecting any kind of reward from others. Actually , they do, what they do all the time. But most of the time'the heroes we worship, become so, for a special or brave act they have done in their entire life.You are trying to put forward a very timely idea. I like your poem very much.
but, I don't know whether it is a typo or whether I am wrong, but if the word 'honored' in the line "It's time we honored them but not with statuary." in the last verse can change into 'honor' it is more suitable.
What a pity! I could have used some to lure the man of my dreams but alas, it is too late. Your writing is very vibrant and lively, I feel like reading a book of Rollings. (no offence). Portions, charms, invisible cloaks and wizards all seem very real and part of our daily life. Thank you for letting me enjoy your writing.
After reading your foot note I couldn't leave without giving a comment. I must thank you for letting me read a new poetry form. I know how difficult it is to abide by the rules of a new form while trying to be creative.With a very few words you say about your allergy to pollen, looking at the Spring in a new angle. I think you don't need my recommendations to tell you that you are a very talented poet. I enjoyed your poem very much.
Though it is just a chapter from a novel, I could enjoy it as a separate piece of writing. It was complete with characters, a plot, incidents flowing smoothly between those characters without going back or referring to past incidents which would have been unclear for readers who read only this chapter. I enjoyed it. Congratulations.
It's very unusual, but I like the plot.Normally, I don't read this kind of stories, but the opening sentences drew me to them. The novelty of the plot and the incident between just two characters made it easy for me to understand the story. I was melancholic when the story was over. Nice attempt. Congratulations for your writing.
I like to read your poems, though some of them are beyond my comprehension, due to high flown language! but I like this poem as it paints me a vivid picture of your 'pickled prince'. He has anything but nothing.He is completed with an invaluable kingdom with nothing valuable.
I like the paradoxes your poem bring out. The words paint the picture of the prince and his kingdom.Though I am not aware of what "the highway 4 underpass" is, I assume that the beggar sits in a street and beggs from passers-by.
I thought that when the beggar says 'pay your toll' what he means is to pay taxes to the government, but it turns out that the beggar is forcing people to look after him. I don't know whether my interpretation of your poem is wrong. If so, disregard my words. Anyhow, I enjoyed it. It is a nice poem with so many unusual metaphors and similes.
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