I love how your poem describes something that is thought to be undescribable. It shows that you can think out of the box.
Suggestions: I think that the part where it says "you said you needed love am i the one you had in mind? protect yourself," should be either moved up or not be there. The reason I think this is, once you say, "I am AIDS," you have gotten to your point and don't need to go farther
Continue writing,
Alyssa
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