I like the sincerity that is felt when reading this poem. It is calming but deep at the same time. I like how you went straight to what you wanted to say. A certain emotion came within me. I believe it may have been a feeling of overall peace and calming.
I really like this poem a lot. I like the flow of it, and how you use a single word through most of the poem to pause. it really makes you think about the last verse you spoke. I have never read a poem like this and think you did a great job!
I think some of the wording is off and could be changed to sound better but overall it has a good message. Now a title for these lyrics that may be good is probably "Lies in Reality" could possibly work with what you are saying. Also you could try changing the Thank in your second line to think because that may possibly make more sense. It also seems as if you are trying to make things end in "ank" randomly through your lyrics which is good but trying to rhyme randomly in lyrics or poetry doesn't always have to happen. Overall good lyrics, and with a little fine tuning I could really relate to what you have said. Good Job!!
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