This is an awesome children's story! I could break it down into all the different ways it is specifically infused with layer upon layer of teaching and morals, but I won't. The only thing you might do is clean itup a bit, shorten unnecessary sentences and find words to combine meanings in description. Would LOVE to see this with pictures!
Thank you for writing it
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