I really dig the perspective on this...or the two perspectives, as it stands..one being told by the "ringer", the other by the "ringee"...
Most can relate to this experience exactly..we've all been alone with the lights off and have had an unexpected visitor of the night...
Fear and adrenaline are such a rush, lol -
Nicely done, Agnie.
Nice thought, Agnie.. So many people don't even realize that God is in every grain of sand, or hair on their heads...
I thought this was a cute thought, if I may be permitted, as a man, to say "cute", lol -
What a truly awesome poem! This piece really blows me away! LOVE the style...the "OUT" midpoint is extremely impressive - your poem transforms while still holding theme...I am usually better at explaining why a poem touches me, But honestly, I have been rendered nearly speechless.
Truly amazing work you have done! Be proud of this piece, for I am proud for you as well.
A relly nice piece....I enjoyed that so much more than I thought I would..I must be honest - when I read the description, I hesitated to enter, thinking that a sonnet written for english class was a toss up. But I am glad that I did - I'd misjudged again.
I really like the feel of this poem. It is the one of the most descriptive poems I've read using so few words. The reader can clearly see what you are going for without being weighed down by wordiness and over-emotionality. Good job on this piece. Hope your english teacher gave you an A+ !!!
Thanks for sharing this. I enjoyed reading it.
The reason I am rating a 5 is because I have similar experience with what they now call "mood disorders".
You have described exactly the emotions that so many of us twisted people feel/have felt. Thank you for your honesty in this piece and letting us into the private areas of your thoughts.
What an a**hole is my first reaction. The reader almost wishes you would write a poem about someone beating the crap out of this character! Very strong emotion comes out in this piece. Well written and kudos on describing the thought process in this type of situation. Not easy to do.
Well done, Ma'am.
Wow. You transported me into your world here. I could almost hear the creaks and moans of your home settling as you lay awake listening. Truly very good!
I especially like the line about Bonds never judging you. Know what you mean - been there, done that.
Good work, sir.
what an amazing description of the "little rituals" we all have in daily life. truly awesome, Kings. I felt as though i were sitting in the room with you; it was as if i could almost smell the dying wick.
amazing.
(fountainman) k.c.
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