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Review of A Mother's Eyes  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian C Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
WOW! Thank you for sharing and it is an emotional time for me these days now that I've started to live alone and I haven't been talking to mom a lot. This made me think of her and I also did write bout mom but this short poem spoke more than the long one I wrote. Keep writing.
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Review of How are you?  Open in new Window.
Review by Julian C Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I have a similar experience so I can relate to this. This is my correction on a bit of grammar but dont take it as a hard critique.

"How are you?"
I saw a text as soon as I woke up this morning.

It appears simple, but the riot born in my heart is phenomenal.
After many days of silence and calm, you decided to ping me up and fuel the fire.
The fire that has been in my heart that set out the day we last spoke,
Your memories freak me out every day,
Your absence showed me the way to absolute loneliness,
Your words destroyed the pillars of self-confidence I've built over a lifetime,
My tears dried up, not being able to find a way out
The happy face I carry around is making me more tangled.
"I'm Scared of being not scared of losing me anymore"
Trust me,
I tried, but never a single drop of tear to shed.
I tried, but not a single day I didn't think about you.
I tried, but no one ever could replace you.
All I could do is accept that,"I left you, for a greater good".

And I replied, "FINE"...

Thank you for sharing I loved it, keep writing with all your heart because it's beautiful and the small moment you described with such expression proves that you're a wonderful person.
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