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Review of A Beer  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Interesting improvements with the new details about the kids possibly having played with the time machine and the medieval people thinking the time traveler is a witch.

A couple thoughts- is the narrator male or female? If male, the medieval people might think he’s a warlock rather than a witch.

We still don’t know why the narrator expected to time travel to a hotel in 1982.
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Review of broccoli  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Nice work! I like how you started off with “bring it on!” And then the acrostic with green letters is a nice touch.
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Review of I am Kay  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome story, and great response to the prompt. You have one two syllable word though - “very” at the end.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
They make me sad and mad too. Nothing anyone says seems to affect them, but it does help everyone else to speak up.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great work! Congratulations on your Cramp win today.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great window into the civil rights movement!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sad but apt for the moment.
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Review of The Lost Hour  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great, sad story.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Really awesome essay! These headlines are hilarious. Good luck in the Cramp.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice hopeful idea and good use of the prompt. “A missed appointment with fate” is a nice phrase.🙂
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice job on this - sweet ending. 🙂
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Review of Verbum Quaerere  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very fun! I don’t do word searches much because of compatibility with my smart phone, but it’s fun to see the words from Ancient Rome. It reminds me of my high school Latin class.
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Review of The Coffee Monkey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great short story- I like the set up you did with this quote because it half made me expect the new puppy would make coffee somehow:
But I knew in my heart that I would never be able to teach it to make the morning coffee.
You also set up the punch line in the first paragraph without ruining the surprise. The little details about Marsha’s job, the kids growing up, the death of the old dog, and the puppy all tie in well, even with a story this short. The puppy seems to stand for hope for the future- feeling like a lot of things are possible in a new phase of life.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Very cute! I like the idea of a “sole” mate.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice story! Congrats on winning the Cramp today. 🙂
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting juxtaposition of future and traditional imagery. The appearance of heaven at the end was definitely a surprise🙂
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Sounds like a self fulfilling prophecy- he destroyed the chamber because it was trying to destroy him. Nice work!
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Nice work! I like how you found a logical way for them to discover each other’s birthdays. I’m curious what their career field was and how they ended up getting jobs in the Muggle world.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love the names - Amelia Bedelia, Buttermilk3 - and the moderator intervention!
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Review of The Angel Number  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Brilliant! I love this. It’s a pleasant twist and includes the numerology without seeming over the top.
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Review of Escape  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is great- very realistic, with the ash making the car stop. I like the detail of the grizzly bear bringing up the rear/chasing behind.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I hope an apocalyptic event like this never happens, but it’s an interesting story.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice work! Remember to put the keywords in bold to qualify for the contest.
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Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thoughtful words on the bleakness of the political situation…
You may need to check against the Sept requirements re: need for 4 syllables in the fourth line (in the first stanza) and need for 7 lines (you have 8 in the third stanza).
Have a great day!
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Review of Groceries  Open in new Window.
Review by ChristineB Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Too true! Nice sept.
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