Interesting improvements with the new details about the kids possibly having played with the time machine and the medieval people thinking the time traveler is a witch.
A couple thoughts- is the narrator male or female? If male, the medieval people might think he’s a warlock rather than a witch.
We still don’t know why the narrator expected to time travel to a hotel in 1982.
Interesting scene setting, with the “hypnosis setting to stupify the human so it wouldn’t remember,” and the somewhat scary, “bag ‘em and tag ‘em” dialogue in reference to the greys. I wondered what it was the greys actually did when they abducted humans and what the humans intended to do with them.
Very fun! I don’t do word searches much because of compatibility with my smart phone, but it’s fun to see the words from Ancient Rome. It reminds me of my high school Latin class.
Great short story- I like the set up you did with this quote because it half made me expect the new puppy would make coffee somehow: But I knew in my heart that I would never be able to teach it to make the morning coffee.
You also set up the punch line in the first paragraph without ruining the surprise. The little details about Marsha’s job, the kids growing up, the death of the old dog, and the puppy all tie in well, even with a story this short. The puppy seems to stand for hope for the future- feeling like a lot of things are possible in a new phase of life.
Nice work! I like how you found a logical way for them to discover each other’s birthdays. I’m curious what their career field was and how they ended up getting jobs in the Muggle world.
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