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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is GREAT--I got a major kick out of it.
The only thing I see is that the lyrics kind of lose momentum somehow as the song progresses. Verse 4--the last line "Presses the microwave buttons, not venting the seal" is a bit klunky. I would try more tightly parodying the same line in the Eagles tune.
The second part of the bridge needs a little work, too. Maybe a 'tighter' parody of the same line in the actual song would work better.
Overall, this is good songwriting!
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