How powerful this piece is. Above my desk in my 5th grade clssroom is a small wooden block that reads, "You are the Author of Your Own Life Story." I keep telling my children to write it down. We recently discovered that Langston Huges wrote more than one autobiography. So even if you think the story ends, you can always re-write it from a diofferent perspective. Write-on, Your Faithful Rhymer, Chickpea
This was really a great story. Maybe it could be the first chapter of a book. I hate shopping at the mall, so I found this story intriguing. It is excellently written and contains great descriptive passages like...her knee-high stockings. I could almost picture her on her cane. I would like to read the sequel.
What an awesome poem. The vivid imagery is amazing. The snow is three feet deep outside right now yet reading your poem, I feel like simmer inside. Free Verse was an excellent choice for this piece. Alliteration in “Wind would breath….outside my window.” and “Through the trees,”
proves to be very effective in this piece, as well. My favorite part was “Now the seasons answer one into another without a question.” Also, the part … “the trees tethered to the yard.” This is one of the best poems I have read on here. Have you considered publishing this one?
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