This is a very emotional piece. I can feel your pain from the first verse being read. I like the way you express exactly how you feel in your wording. This style of writing can really be of "positive" form of healing the hurt and pain this relationship has caused. Very well written.
Hello Audrey, I like the poem and the sentiments of what you are trying to say, but I don't think it uses enough emotional words. The whole of the poem itself does make me feel the pain of what the war does to people. Please keep writing more because I like your style.
Cheryl Snow
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