I really liked it, and you had a great idea and plotline and I love little Timmy :) but it's very hard to read. The grammar is alright but there is just to much paragraphs. (Don't worry, a lot of people had this problem) and sometimes the eyes need a little break, that's why other authors use your kind of paragraphs that are important or something. But when I looked at it, first glace it already made me tired to read. Other then that, I freaking love your story! Keep writing!
its alright, i really liked it because it was peaceful...But and it fits perfectly for Christmas Eve for the holidays and pray. But its sad because of the slaves and i liked it how they prayed, which was nice....
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