Beautiful and if it's true then don't think about the rejects of life that did that to you
think about the success in life that has or will come and you are dreaming; your writing right so that is a dream that probably you have don't let any impediment stand in your way and I know its not your fault that happened to you but make sure that you show no emotion to their disgusting ways for you are beautiful no matter what and whoever tries to bring you down make sure you say suck it and get on with your life
love the writing keep it up!!!
woah that piece was beautiful I liked it a bunch maybe you should consider making it longer, there's nothing wrong with it now but if it was a little longer then you will have people crying
SOME IDEAS:
"Life is so unfair
The rich get richer and the poor (get) disgraced
(People get killed because of a different race) THEN
Is religion the answer?"
Just to Try to make it longer maybe you should speak more about religion
and how it has affected you in any kind of way
Keep up the writing!!!!
-Chankleta
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