Awesome visualisation. The language is good too except for a bit of editing. Commas in the wrong place et all and Krow is spelt differently in different places. Minor and can be addressed.
The concept of anti-hero is well framed in this narrative. If the same tempo forms part of the rest of the narrative I would think this is good material.
All the best!
A being that could wipe Lancelot and his troops was raped and made to work abroad a viking ship. definitely a clearer definition of her travel and intent in tolerating lesser beings is required. Good work needs to be polished.
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