This is a very interesting story. I can't wait to see how it develops. I love how you give his emotions personalities (I.e. VOM, VOR). Is there a reason for the use of whilst instead of while? It feels a little awkward. Just curious, are you going to further define who Wanda and Katrina are to him? I think Katrina is mom. I also noticed odor is spelled odours, is there a reason for this? Again, I really like the way you write. I love the imagery. Hope to read more soon.
I love this. It was awesome. It would be nice if this was a story. More imagery would be nice too. However, I like how you FEEL the connection between them.
Thank you for such an insightful article. I have heard many Africans say that we are not African. To receive such a warm invite from an actual African is heartening. Your prospective was enlightening. I cannot imagine such a world. A trip to Africa is definitely on my bucket list.
Thanks again
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