I love it when I read poems like this. Ones that are spoke in a poetic tone and the words just flow together in rhyme. I got so lost in the words that it took me a few moments to remember myself, this was a really good piece.
I hope your not looking in any advice, because I have none. Trust me, I read it three time, looking for something that I might be able to say about it that could improve you. But I can't. It's just wonderful.
I think that does make a good response to Darley's poem. And I like the way you started out, making it seem like the two of you were talking to each other. Made the poem more enjoyable, for me at least. All I can truly say is keep up the good work and don't stop writing! Your poetry is really good!
Chained Voice
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