Wow, you did a great job explaining how one simple issue can lead to so many other problems. There were a significant number of grammatical errors throughout, but I still really enjoyed the story itself, and I was really happy that the main character's integrity shone through in the end and he was rewarded for his efforts.
I really admire how you made something so business-like into something really fun! This has a pretty consistent meter to it and it hops along nicely as I read it. Well done!
I really like this poem! It starts out a little dark, but there's a spark of hope at the end! It's simple yet it packs a punch, and it's really relatable.
This was a pleasure to read, especially the sentences about cottonwood leaves being yellow to the senses. I think you did a great job making the prompt into your own, well, unique story! I did think to was odd that, after putting so much emphasis on the fact that cottonwood leaves are yellow, you discuss "the waxy deep green of cottonwood leaves" toward the end. I realize this is because of the leaves changing colors in different seasons, but it still jarred me out of the story just a little and made me think, "Now wait just a minute."
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