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Review of WINTER  Open in new Window.
Review by Kayda Kent Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nice! Perhaps you could personify winter a little more, or mix in her feelings for the living beings, to make her seem more imaginable. Or perhaps you were trying to make her a mysterious, watching figure, known but unknown...

It's great!
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Review of One Last Wish  Open in new Window.
Review by Kayda Kent Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Wow! The poem was beautiful, and the story was engaging. You could use a few more descriptive words (or different ones) here and there though.

Her dress billows like hope? maybe... hope of what?

Her son was offended over nada- that part seems a little serious. Even if someone was lighthearted, they would probably use a different word.

"I won't let my life switch for one goddamn witch!" Did you mean for that to rhyme? it's kind of odd right there.

However, I love the part where you write "I gazed into the receiver with disgust and wondered if his indifference got caught inside the wires of the apparatus." Wonderfully put! I can see what an idiot this character is!

All in all, great job!
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