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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Moe aka John Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "Journey Through Genres: Comedy" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
I was quite taken with Miss Irma Appleseed and her blight of being the younger sister of a the famous Johnny Appleseed. Her character is well developed, as are her dreams. I wanted to get to know her better so I stayed with the story.

Characters:
Miss Irma Regina Appleseed - who wants to be a green, healing witch.

Setting:
A farm village or commmunity somewhere in the United States.

Plot:
Irma wants nothing to do with apples - she is allergic. She wants to be a healing witch. She is called to help a nearby community with their withered wheat and dying apple trees and she is able to concoct something that works.

Favourite Part:
She is 'catastrophically clumsy'. You did an excellent job or portraying that.


Suggestions:
It would be easier to read it the font size was bigger and spaces were put between the paragraphs giving more white space. Sometimes the appearance of a piece can pull in readers.
I would also say giving the piece a title would interest readers to read your work. In my reading and reviewing for judging, I left this one until the end because no title inspired me.
I see no spelling or grammar issues.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

-💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon, judge for the "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.


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Review of False Alarm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Amethyst Autumn Angel Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "False Alarm" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
Frank and Joe had me thinking the Hardy boys. I think it's a good adventure for the teenagers, but I just can't help thinking the Dad watching is not a good enough reason for him not to take care of the problem. Aside from the that... the story held me.

Characters:
Dad, Frank, Joe, Chet and his dog, Duchess.

Setting:
It begins at Frank and Joe's house with their Dad getting a call about the alarm goin off at the construction site of the new rest area. The boys pick up their friend and his dog and go see what they can do to stop the alarm.

Plot:
Frank, Joe and Chet head out to the construction site to see how to stop the noise and lights.

Favourite Part:
liked Duchess chasing the squirrel.

Suggestions:
I see no spelling or grammar issues.

I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Kaytings Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your Short story "The Day the Goat Stole the Wedding" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:


Characters:
Bongo the goat
Chinwe and Emeka
Uncle Pascal

Setting:
Chinwe's wedding. This could be a cultural thing... but I would say Chinwe and Emeka's wedding.
Church and reception


Plot:
Overhearing that goat meat will be on the menu for the wedding, Bongo makes his escape and adds more chaos to the wedding.


Favourite Part:
Uncle Pascal's speech.


Suggestions:
Space out the paragraphs to give more white space and make it easier to read.

I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

-💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon, judge for the "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Enthusiasm Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your story story "The Indecent Proposal " Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
Now this was funny! I am not a fan of technical devises running my life.... and I am a Henderson, as well! Miles is no relation, but I can support his aversion to Jeezes.


Characters:
Miles Henderson
Chloe - his wife who bought the new tech devise.
Jeeves - the tech devise

Setting:
Miles and Chloe's house has a new tech devise.

Plot:
Chloe has purchased a new tech devise (X5000 ULTRA-SENSE HOME ASSISTANT). Miles is not a fan of this devise and it proves quickly to be very bothersome. When Miles tries to take a hammer to it... and it freaks him out. When his wife gets home, she unplugs him. When the new vacuum arrives that Jeeves ordered, it begins to be a pain and they flip it over and feed it kale... Oh, the indignity.

Favourite Part:
Miles trying to take a hammer to Jeeves and it freaks him out.


Suggestions:
Not sure about the title - maybe Undignified Proposal. I see no spelling or grammar issues.


Additional Comments:
Well done.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hi PureSciFiPlus Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "Keep Them Laughing" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
I think there is a good concept here, but I also think some editing could make it stronger and not so confusing.


Characters:
Fran
her parents - Patrick and Juliet
Friends
An agent

Setting:
Nothing was really described... there was a comedy club, Fran's parent's home, her office.


Plot:
From what I can gather, Fran wants more to her life than data entry and decides to take a crack at going to a comedy club with her friends. And this leads to finding an agent and getting into a comedy competition.


Suggestions:
I found myself getting confused with the time changes and the people. Maybe few people and more names would help.
Instead of a scene at work, have Fran talk to her friends (with names) about how boring her job is and her dreams. Have those friends go with her to the comedy club to see her in action. I would leave out the stage fright aspect. But these are only suggestions.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Review of The Inept Butler  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Sumojo Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "The Inept Butler" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
A cute story with ghostly leanings. A young woman moving into her first place and living alone for her first time.

Characters:
Matilda - young woman moving into her first apartment
James - a displaced ghost believing he is still in lives in London, England, but is in Australia.

Setting:
Matilda's new apartment.


Plot:
Matilda moves in and hears a voice. It is James who feels utterly lost. He wants to be of use so Matilda teaches him to use the current technology and he orders 200 Litres of Milk - she actually asks - "How many life's of milk did you order?" I think this was supposed to be litres.
She decides to donate the milk to the food bank.

Favourite Part:
I like the fact that James is not scary and Matilda is sweet with him.


Suggestions:
I caught that one mistake with "life's" instead of litres. Other than that I see no other spelling or grammar issues.

Additional Comments:
A cute story.

I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

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Review of Twin Trouble  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping! Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your [item type] {item:}. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
This story was very telling. I enjoyed the scenes when the Twins were given voice - like in the Principal's office.

Characters:
Only the father was given a name.
The sisters were the oldest and the other.
The twins were Twin #1 and Twin #2 this made is challenging for the reader, but the confusion went with the story so it worked.


Setting:
We move through schools and athletics in a general way. Nothing really stands out.

Plot:
Twinning can cause trouble and these two twins cause their fair share.... or more.
The story moves through the twins lives from birth to mentioning Twin #1 having twin grandchildren.
It highlights a few highlights during their school journey.


Favourite Part:
I love the 'how sweet' changing to a brisk 'good morning' after only three days of being in Kindergarten.


Suggestions:
I see no spelling or grammar issues.

Additional Comments:
The story seemed to move very quickly through their lives. I liked when you slowed down and showed the trouble.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi rick1221;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for [insert link to contest here]. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "The Great Coffee Catastrophe" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
Now this was funny! Life without coffee... and so dramatically done. I was hooked from the first sentence.

Characters:
The characters were well done.
Simon the poor intern stuck with getting the coffees from the shop- "Bean there, Done That" (great name)
Darren - the co-worker who dropped to his knees, fainted on the filing cabinet and spoke to Simon at the end.
Marge - with the rare smile
Mr. Weaver - the boss
And of course 'The Machine' itself - loved the timestamps!

Setting:
The office of Weaver Associates on a Tuesday. I love how you even gave Tuesday a feel - like Monday with less hope.
And Simon going to the coffee shop - a rather treacherous trek

Plot:
At 9 am The Machine gives up the ghost. I love how all the employees are gathered around it and how it is described.
By 9:15 am the office has come to a stand-still. They draw straws to see who will go to the coffee shop around the corner to get them all coffees - 20 of them.
Simon, the intern is picked and he has quite the comical time of it as construction and birds are in on the fun.
When he returns they are upset that the coffees are all black.... and then 'The Machine' comes back to life.

Favourite Part:
This story was riddled with fun bits:
'The Machine' itself and its time stamps.
Simon's quest for coffee.
Even the dramatic of Darren and Marge were a hoot.

Suggestions:
I see no spelling or grammar issues.

Additional Comments:
Well done. my hat is off to you for coming up with such a creative, funny story.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi LightinMind Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short story "I don't speak girl!" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
I will have to say, I appreciated the Notes section about whether this was a comedy or a tragedy. I found the piece well written and I was drawn into the story. Did I find it funny... hmmm. I would say it was more social commentary of the times - a reminder that some men don't get it. And women tend to make things more complicated than they need to, but only because we don't want to upset the male ego.


Characters:
Jeremy - a clueless man after his divorce
Pastor - quite possibly a woman, but Jeremy assumes they are male.
Ex-wife and daughter are mentioned - they exemplify the gender wars of the times.

Setting:
In the Pastor's office.

Plot:
The times they are a-changing and poor Jeremy can't keep up. The pastor explains woman speak to him and he is baffled to hear and to wonder why the pastor understands it so well.


Favourite Part:
I wouldn't say this was a favourite part, but it did evoke emotion = I wanted to kick his ass.
“Oh, Pastor, if I knew that, I'd probably still be married. However, I don’t speak girl. I hear female emotions like white noise or that car alarm that goes off at three am that no one knows how to switch off.”


Suggestions:
I see no grammar or spelling issues.


Additional Comments:
This piece did evoke emotions is me.... just not humour. For that I would say it was successful. Just not a comedy, for me.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi David Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short piece "The Haunted Doorbell" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
Cute piece, but very short.


Characters:
Mia and Sam.
The name of the house is the Bramble House. Love that.


Setting:
The porch of the old Bramble House.


Plot:
Two children - the Kings of Mischief play pranks on the neghbourhood by ringing the doorbell of the old house.


Favourite Part:
The ending - the last two sentences.


Suggestions:
I see no spelling or grammar issues.

Would they be the Kings of Mischief or the King and Queen of Mischief?


Additional Comments:
This story is very short and could have been developed into something with more meat on it. I love the concept and the images you do create, but I don't see a doorbell scaring the neighbours unless it is very loud and booms out in to the neighbourhood. Doorbells usually make sound in the house and the people going by are outside...


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Review of The Uninvited  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon;
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering!

My name is Carly and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your story "The Uninvited" Open in new Window.. I wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please remember that I am not a professional and my opinions and thoughts are only meant to help you. Take what you can use and disregard anything you do not feel suits you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. The piece is ultimately yours and that must be honoured.


Overall Impressions:
The sweetest of revenge when the 'popular' twats get what's coming to them - karma can be a b-atch. Liked the ending - not inviting any of those to his own wedding.


Characters:
The main character is Norman... Norman the nerd
Lucy
The other drivers - co-workers of Norman


Setting:
Not much description of the place, but it is a workplace - a supermarket where Norman works as a driver delivering groceries.


Plot:
We are introduced to Norman and we find out he works for a supermarket that has a lot of drivers that went to the same school as him. His nickname, Norman the Nerd, sticks with him.
He is never invited out to their parties and is often sent pictures of things he was not privy too and called a LOSER.
When the party of the century happens and he is not invited it seems same old, same old until everyone who goes gets food poisoning. Karma!
Norman and a few others who didn't go to the party are left making the deliveries.
When Norman later marries Lucy they don't invite any of those idiots.


Favourite Part:
He didn't invite any of the other people he works with that treat him like a loser.


Suggestions:
I didn't see any grammar or spelling issues, but I would have liked a bit more develop of Normans relationship with Lucy so that is not so quick to get them married at the end.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maid of the Mist Most Macabre Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have chosen you to review as part of today's prompt on "Blog Week Birthday Bastion 2025" Open in new Window..

First, I love that you are a fellow Canadian! I also enjoyed reading over your portfolio to decide what piece to review. I can see the humour sprinkled all over the place and it warmed my heart.

I love the whatchamacallit and the thingajig.... doohickey.

I live with my mother who is dealing with Dementia - it is a cruel disorder that steals her past and her present and her future. At 87 she should be vital, but memory issues took away her driver's license and since then she has gone downhill.... fast.

It my own 58 years I worry about my own mind. And I don't have children to take care of me if anything goes sideways.

I can relate to this story - on both sides of the loss. The looking and trying to help and in the losing of the thing... or idea. Hence, I write everything I can down as soon as possible to keep it safe in my thoughts.

Thank you for sharing your story. Hope you are enjoying the festivities of the 25th Birthday celebration.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ;

I am doing one of my reviews as part of today's prompt for "Blog Week Birthday Bastion 2025" Open in new Window. and I decided to chose you as I don't believe I have ever reviewed anything of yours before.

I see this piece is from 2015 so I am hoping Bella is still with you.

My client is autistic and his mother, who has MS, have had service dogs for many years. I have worked with him for over 30 years and he has had 3 absolutely wonderful service dogs - Raven, Dakota and Tice. Each one was retired before a new one joined the family so I got to spoil them in their retirement whenever I went to visit.

We have a Canadian TV commercial up here that has a blind woman standing at a street light unable to cross because she does not have a service dog - the ad is to get people to donate to make Service Dogs available to those who really need them. The ad always brings tears to my eyes. And yes, the woman gets her dog at the end of the ad.

Kindhearted, independence is what they offer.... fuzzy LOVE.

I really enjoyed your poem. A blessing for sure. Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann Author IconMail Icon;

I'm 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and and I have the pleasure of raiding your portfolio and reviewing something as part of the "It's WDC- 25th Birthday" scavenger hunt. Today we have to find members who joined WDC between 2002 and 2004 and your lovely name popped up.

This was an interesting adventure. That 19 hour flight sounds killer, but the also sound worth it. Too bad you didn't get into that bar - it sounds cool... or rather cold. *Bigsmile*

I would love to go to Australia one day. So far I have only taken Witchy Woman Author IconMail Icon's virtual trips to the area. That was a blast, but going and being there is so much the better. The sights, the smells, the tastes, the full bodied experience.

Maybe one day. But for now I am connect to readd accounts like yours and dream. Have you been anywhere else is Australia?


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
OH Sophy on vacation! Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of raiding your portfolio and reviewing something as part of the "It's WDC- 25th Birthday" scavenger hunt. Today we have to find members who joined WDC between 2002 and 2004 and your lovely name popped up.

I LOVE SLAM poetry! This piece brings me to tears in the rawness of it - most slam poetry hits me like this. So personal, so raw, so honest... it's humbling.

I was pulled in by your words and the pain of that betrayal. The frustration of doctors that don't care and write you off.... and others who can save - not just the body, but the soul within.

I feel for your infertility. And yet in the end there is hope of a life lived and learned and accepted after so long a mental battle. Write on and share your words like a fierce woman that you are!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi James A. Osteen Jr. Author IconMail Icon;

I'm 💙 Carly: Joan Watson Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of raiding your portfolio and reviewing something as part of the "It's WDC- 25th Birthday" scavenger hunt. Today we have to find members who joined WDC between 2002 and 2004 and your lovely name popped up.

I really enjoyed your poem. I realize it is dated 2007 so I am hoping you are still writing and sharing your pieces here and about.

I am living with a mother who is dipping into dementia so memory loss is huge in my world. I find my own brain turning mushy with all the stress of dealing with her and her confusion.

Your quatrains have a rhyming pattern that is soothing and wonderful to read.

We are all growing older and things are definitely slipping. Reading your poem I felt nostalgia and also smiled at the ideas put forth.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi a Sunflower in Texas Author IconMail Icon;

It's Carly and I have the pleasure of raiding your portfolio and reviewing something as part of the "It's WDC- 25th Birthday" scavenger hunt. Today we have to find members who joined WDC between 2002 and 2004 and your lovely name popped up.

I decided to pick a fiction piece and went with this. My original name is Carolyn so I am pretty vigilant on find the name spelt wrong. You left the 'o' out of the 4 last paragraph, but beyond that everything else looks great.

I like the idea of meeting back up with friends after a decade apart. Especially an old boyfriend. Caroline has made some changes and lost weight. She old beau is cranky and makes quite a few 'fat' comments. I would be curious to see the meeting itself.

I wanted to know more. Caroline sounds like an interesting character.


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Well, THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping! Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your 25 sentences for the Bard's Hall contest as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

It's quite a tale and I happen to think witches are awesome. This looks like a piece you had fun writing and I wish you luck in the contest.

You got it all done in 25 sentences. I love how the treasure was taken back to Party Central until it is needed.

Hope you enjoy the Birthday celebrations. This is the best time of year here on WDC. It makes September not seem so overwhelming.... I am back to supply teaching again this week... but I doubt anyone will be taking this first week off so I will write to my heart's content.


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Hi Pumpkin Spice Sox Author IconMail Icon;
I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

This was a great piece - very moving. It held me from the first sentence. I liked how you incorporated the words. The last two lines brought tears to my eyes. Powerful.

I hope you do really well in the contest... I'll have to check.
Thank you for sharing your work. I'm glad I got to review you after you reviewed my own piece. *BigSmile*

I don't see any spelling or grammatical issues.


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Hi Angelica Weatherby- Thankful Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before my entry into the I Write in 2025 forum.

Even as a teacher, reading this gives me nerves.... I am not ready to go back. August seems to fly by.

I haven't decided if this is university... or high school. Though it would work for either. The last verse had me scratching my head. Is this a professor or student conjuring this poem - Associate professor or bachelor student.

Personally, I have my Bad Attitude (BA) and my BEd (Bachelor of Education).

I wish you luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.


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Hi Jeffrey Meyer Author IconMail Icon;

Interesting wee flash fiction piece. I am a little nervous about what the 'invisible boy' will do with the knives.

How does Freddy know where the remote is after seeing the smile on the mirror. Is the 'invisible boy' a part of himself? His home life seems unsettled and frightening for a wee boy... has he got some kind of split personality?

I did notice an extra word in this sentence: "Even if he had the vocabulary, he wouldn't have been able to make his mother would understand."

Either way, I thought it was a rather good story and worthy of the win. Congratulations.

Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed the piece.


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Hi Jeffrey Meyer Author IconMail Icon;
Wow... I didn't see that twist coming. I was rivetted from the beginning. Congratulations on the wind. It is disserved. I was up against some great competition this round. Well done.


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Hi Lonewolf Author IconMail Icon;
I loved this tale. Well done. The story pulled me in from the very beginning and I had to know how the boy made out. I also loved that the captain was a woman.

Here's to Black-eye Blackburn! Cheers!



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Hi Sumojo Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum. I do appreciate that you are going beyond the 25 entries as it gives some of us slower challengers a chance to read and review some great stuff.

I really like your poem. You have chosen some powerful words to convey the image of a beach. One that is a contrast - one not so spectacular, but rather chilly and the other hot and worthy of a dip. I could imagine each of those beaches at various parts of the year.

One note: I had to look up the form of a diamante poem as I was aware of all the rules off hand. I like it when that kind of thing is added to the bottom as a note or some sort of thing. I think you follow the form, but I always thought the first and last lines are related or opposite nouns.


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