Very scary and the images leaped off the page. I enjoyed the tale but had some trouble with the reasons as to why the girl was killed. At first I thought it was the butler or the gardener and was confused when the father had done it. Is it referring to the parents letting the older men hurt their child and then deciding to do away with her? Please let me know. I really enjoyed it.
The historical background was interesting but I would enjoy some more in depth detail, not only of the hotel's history, but also of it's past ghostly apperances. I would also enjoy a more complete description of the hotel and of the people who experienced the phenomenon. I might suggest the author read the story out loud for flow. I do enjoy a good ghost story and this has the bones of one.
For the requirement, I loved this story. It didn't need descriptions or character names. It was short, to the point and funny. I really enjoyed the alien's descrption of his race's television and how easily the conversation was cut short by the human's reply and unwillingness to talk.
The author seemed to be aiming for something existential. If what I am thinking is correct, the author wanted the reader to feel that George had not lived a full life and that he was unhappy with the end result, while Charles who had friends and people he talked to on a regular basis was almost nonchalant about his surroundings. Maybe Charles' cell reflected the life he had lived, while George's reflected his, featureless, formless and self encasing. I liked the message of the story and would enjoy a rewrite with more description heading towards the authorls ultimate statement.
Perfect! I thought it conveyed exactly what the author described it to be. I know I have been that little child scared to death under the covers, the only thing I can think of that would make it even closer to home is the little girl piling stuffed animals around her to form a fuzzy fort of protection.
I thought the writing was good and so was the imagery. I know the story was meant to come full circle, but I feel a little unsatisfied. I know the author didn't mean for there to be a resolution, but this to me was just a descriptive narrative of a larger story. I guess I just wish he hadn't gotten away with anything. Not only was he a worthless human being, but he was abl eto get away with a number of things that were awful. I wonder if the author has future plans with this character? If so, I don't believe they will concern the woman's body, but I believe the bird them will continue. He is a bird with clipped wings who takes his anger out by clipping the wings of the other birds around him.
This story made me laugh at the end. I liked the matter of fact way grandma told them there's an eagle in the closet. There was no fright coming from her characer just a that's the way it is. Very cute. While I was first reading it, I thought, why an eagle. Once I read to the end I realized it didn't matter. An eagle was in the closet. That's why you don't go in the closet. Kind of like, doc it hurts when I do this, then don't do it.
I liked the story, but had some trouble with the transitions. I need more explanation as to why the man's wife didn't go with him. Also I kept wondering if he hit the old man in the head with the rock. I understand that he buried himself like a rose, but I would like some more background info on the Kokopelli figure and as to why the man started following the sound at night. Also I would enjoy a revision that included more information on the nights he found himself walking and more info describing why the man was so bitter. Still enjoyed the story and the incorporation of the Native American Legend.
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