It seems to me in this writing that the savior is a fellow actor just doing what actors do.???!!!I think it's a good description of one segment of an Act in practice. But it may not be, it's what I got when reading it. Great Job! Capristar
I think it's perfect! Your use of adjectives are perfectly placed, the flow of this poem so sweet and savory that it makes me want to live life all over again...in Heaven.
:)
Great work!
Capristar
You have a well written poem here, and it does portray sorrow well! anytime one carries the weight of the world alone, it paints a picture of sorrow!
Your poems all read as a sorrowful man and yet, there is a quality about them that match-
your user Id: Sir Knight so well, especially the "knight" part of your ID. Being a knight must have it's heavy burdens.
your ID recalls to me a poem of Edgar Allen Poe.
Eldorado
Gailey bedight, a gallant knight, In sunshine and in shadow, Had journeyed long, Singing a song, In search of Eldorado. But he grew old-- This knight so bold-- And o're his heart a shadow Fell as he found No spot of ground That looked like Eldorado. And, as his strength Failed him at length, He met a pilgrim shadow-- "Shadow," said he, "Where can it be-- This land of Eldorado?" "Over the mountains Of the moon, Down the Valley of the Shadow, Ride, boldy ride," The shadow replied, IF you seek for Eldorado!"
This Essay is so well thought out and prepared, but what I like most about it's message; is that it touches on a topic that I have thought on for a long time now. The Past,Present, and Future.
Like you said the past is written in stone, the future there glittering on yon tomorrow, but the Present must needs that we open it with the tool of contentment, before it offers it's gift for us today.
Glorious Dreams, are the gold guilding of Hope! I really loved this writing for it made me think about what was being said.I found no errors gramatical or mispelled words.I think you well deserve a 5 star.
Hi E.R.Ward,
I liked this short story really well. It has kept my attention glued to your perfect wording. One reason I was so mesmerized with this story, it reminded me of an old movie The Twilight Zone.
I just kept waiting for some strange thing, something other than that automated hourglass flipping over once more, to happen.
It was surely a revival for this person when he wakes in a cell; but where there is life, there is hope!
Overall, this story was filled with vivid detail and earns a 5 star rating from me. I really enjoyed reading it. Great Job!
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