Holy cow, you deserve an award for this. This has to be one of the best works I have read on this website, it caught me and kept me engaged throughout the whole story. I loved the suspension, the action, and the science fiction sling to it. I have man short stories, but only a few come close to being this good!
This was a good, original first piece of work. I like how you kept the story short, but I thinkk that if it was maybe two paragraphs longer it could have turned into something fantastic, something deseving of a five star review. I will admit that I liked the story, and I liked the message that it sent to the reader(if there is a message, I might be reading things that aren't there lol). Anyways, great first piece, keep up the good work.
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