I think you meant to say that Mother Nature never ceased to amaze you, not Mother Nature ceased to amaze me. Little things like that make all the difference. I believe that your story has potentional, though it seems a bit shallow in some places. But, seeing as this is a first chapter, there is some allowance for that. Your descriptions of the surrounding people and places are quite good. I particularly enjoyed the tree scene.
Not quite Shakespeare, but it is pretty good. I like how you seem to be welcoming the numbing winter instead of regretting the warm summer. Not many poets would do that.20
This made me smile. It's very sweet, and the rhyming gives it a sing-songy lilt to it, which reminences of the song mentioned in your poem. Very, very nice. Good job.
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