Hi JoshtheJiant,
Your poem evokes such imagery and mood. Alliteration (spiderwebs stretched) added musicality. I really enjoyed your final phrase, "The forest is silent but hears everything." Powerful!
Hello Tim,
Your poem has a cyclical mood so fitting your topic. Your chosen words evoke the heavenly bodies you write about. Your alliteration, "harassed and heart-broken," and, "earthly existence,' add musical notes to your poem. I found your phrasing, "to the loss of innocence that earthly existence demands," intriguing. Are you speaking/dare I say writing from personal experience, personal angst, personal pains?
C Alexis
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