I much liked the descriptive language, in addition to the structure. It felt as if a story was being told, and it could be interpreted in a multitude of ways. That's something I really like to see in a poem, and it's also impressive that you managed to convey this in such a short work.
Well written and quite descriptive. Personally, I think perhaps the title should be "Walk Away," because I thought the ending was actually quite good, and ended on such a rather strong note. I felt the beginning was decent, but perhaps could be improved slightly.
Other than that, a good read!
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