The imagery I'm getting from this poem is what I've seen on the silver screen. This poem is missing original imagery. I would like it to evoke new sounds, smells, fears, pain for me but it falls short.
That doesn't take away from the tribute you have written though.
Don't be too discouraged by my criticism, I have had scathing criticisms of my work and it has helped me improve as a writer. I hope this helps you too.
Keep writing!
-Burntpoet
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