Thanks for the fun read. I enjoyed and believed your characters. I found the setting to be captivating. I'll be looking forward to you posting the next chapter of this. I really don't have much I found to critique on, but I did find the very last line confusing. I'm not sure who's feet his eyes rested on.
Great work can't wait to see more!
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