A very dark, painful and emotional poem. I feel that the writer poured him/herself out through this poem.
I truly liked the wording, flow and emotioanl pain the poem reveals.
My favorite stanza was;
You leave me to lie in this pool of roses
The smell sickens my senses
Roses are dead, my heart joins them
Darkness plays with my heart like a puppet
With strings of hate and pain
I feel this is the best stanza, but they are all quality. This one just struck me the best.
An interesting poem and format. I noticed a few mispellings and typos, but as a reader I still can sense the meaning and felt with a little work, it could even better.
A very descriptive writing from a writer trying to better hherself in the english language.
I thought the over all story was nciely done. There are errors, but by the end of the atory the writer has come forth informing all readers with a honest and sincere jesture.
English is a difficult language, what works here, doesn't worh there, this word can be said this or that way. A complex sintax.
Overall, I enjoyed this little story about the writer and her two friends. Keep writing Star. It won't be to long before you are writing more and more.
The writer shows the vast enviroment he enjoys in life.
The flow of the poem was very good and I especialy liked,
"I find the climes that inspire me best
The cold, the rain
The vast fields of ice
Locked inside a glacial realm
My soul captive of its device"
I thought this stood out best from the entire poem. Choice of wording was excellent and well thought out.
The writer came up with a good poll here. To us who love scary movies and like to be scared this was an easy poll to do.
The writer's title and well done selection of movies for the potential answers made it rather difficult to make a finall decision. I liked that I had to think back to which one did the most.
The number one answer was definately the one for me.
I enjoyed taking this poll and enjoyed seeing the end reults. Nice job on this...
The writer was able to draw the reader in to this ghostly tale pretty easily. I liked how the writer described the surroundings and leading up to the end with a cliff hanger end. What happened?
I did see some grammar errors and fragmented sentences, but over all a review by the writer would fix those easily. I would have given a 4.5 for the entire plot and settinf.
I liked this story very much and want to know what happeens at the end. Nice job on this.
A beautiful tribute to five people the writer cared to share with the world.
The five people gave the writer the support,. love, guidence and helped shape this writer's thoughts, hopes, feelings and outcome in a time of pain and sufferign.
Any reader can feel the emotional turmoil, but also the love the writer has for the five people and the remaining family he has left.
The writer has alot of courage inside, any one can see that by reading this powerful story.
Thank you for sharing this and I truly hope the writer has gained much since writing this.
A powerful, emotioanl, truthful story of courage, loss and the ability to carry forward.
A dark, emotional poen regarding the inner feelings of a desperate person.
I found the poem to be very well written, packed with alot of emotion, searching for self and the deapth of someone truly writing within the heart and soul.
The poem flowed very well and the format was pleasntly vivid.
I enjoyed this poem and could feel the writer's energy.
The writer shows a vivid and descriptive story where a man is traveling across several states.
The writer also shows the mentality of a man who is on the edge of losing everything if caught. The man doesn't seem too worried. A veteran of the run I guess.
The twist at the end completely shows how money means more to the man than what he was carrying.
A well set story that I enjoyed reading.
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