Very good freestyle poem! I interpret this as telling us about the story of two people, meeting each other in a romantic place, and the narrator is obviously infatuated/in love with the other person, but they will never meet again, so all of a sudden, things turn depressing.
Very good poem!
Keep up with the Good work!
(Check spelling though!)
The transformation aspect of this story is really great! Also, I love how it uses a common game that is very popular such as FNAF,so more people can relate with it. Overall, good interactive story, but it is very short, in my opinion.
This is really nice. I think it truly embodies what a friend really is. It tells you about what friends do, etc. It is such a positive poem, and I am sure that anyone that is reading it would be cheered up after reading it. Such a good poem in general.
First of all, Nice pictures! If you made those yourself, good job! (I could never make those well)
Also, this is very informative. I can tell how much effort you put into this, with the Pictures and the information inside of the newsletter. I would definitely use this article again, if I had to do something history related on Transylvania!
Keep on rocking, and good job with the newsletter!
Absolutely amazing story! First of all, a good quality of this story, that many more stories do not have, is its length. Many other stories that could live up to the potential of this one are flawed because of the shortage in length. The last sentence also leaves a good impression on readers. "A new world, a new life, a new chance." This is an example of an ending that, when I would read it, would leave me thinking back again on the entire story.
One thing to keep in mind as you are writing these, though, however, is to make sure that the dialogue has some "beef" in it. I.e. "..." she exclaimed, writhing in pain or something like that.
Overall great story, good grammar, great characters! Keep on going!
GOOD LENGTH!!!
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