Great story. I'd like to see where you take it. Just a few grammatical errors but I understood. I really just have one question though. If the aliens are aware of her powers and capability, why would they just shoot her with a regular gun? Or where are they're powers? Maybe add a little more to the fight scenes, nobody is indestructible. Just a few thoughts. Hope it helps.
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